Tes
Junior Member
- Joined
- Oct 5, 2009
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Amharic
- Home Country
- Ethiopia
- Current Location
- United States
Hi everyone, Please correct my writing the way I see my mistakes and improve myself. This is practice not homework. Thank you in advance!
It was March 2010 and it had been three months since I left my job. My jab was involved chemicals, which are dangerous for human. I was not interested risking my life in that situation so I left my job after nine month working for this company.
However, after I left the job things didn’t go as I planned and there was no body who understood how and why I left my job. The only tool that helped me express my self and tell my side of the story was my pen and paper through writing.
Since I left my job because of dangerous working condition, I was expected to collect unemployment benefit while I was looking for another job. However my case was directed to hearing committee and my case was turned over. I got so frustrated, I tried to appeal but my attorney decided not to work with me no matter how much evidence I brought.
At this point, I didn’t gave up instead I became stronger to present myself but as long as I know myself, I was not good at talking. I then started putting my side of the story in words providing enough evidence of the risk I had to take working at that particular company. With that evidence, I appealed for a secondary hearing. I was told I had my evidence was not enough for a secondary hearing. So again, I started to write putting together that happened while I was working there. Again, I asked for another hearing. Finally, my request was accepted at this time, and I won my case.
Thankfully, if I did not put my side of the story in words, I would have won the case. I’m glad I started writing. Writing helps me to express my self better than talking. When I write I think harder and I get to have the time to think of a word that expresses my self the best.
It was March 2010 and it had been three months since I left my job. My jab was involved chemicals, which are dangerous for human. I was not interested risking my life in that situation so I left my job after nine month working for this company.
However, after I left the job things didn’t go as I planned and there was no body who understood how and why I left my job. The only tool that helped me express my self and tell my side of the story was my pen and paper through writing.
Since I left my job because of dangerous working condition, I was expected to collect unemployment benefit while I was looking for another job. However my case was directed to hearing committee and my case was turned over. I got so frustrated, I tried to appeal but my attorney decided not to work with me no matter how much evidence I brought.
At this point, I didn’t gave up instead I became stronger to present myself but as long as I know myself, I was not good at talking. I then started putting my side of the story in words providing enough evidence of the risk I had to take working at that particular company. With that evidence, I appealed for a secondary hearing. I was told I had my evidence was not enough for a secondary hearing. So again, I started to write putting together that happened while I was working there. Again, I asked for another hearing. Finally, my request was accepted at this time, and I won my case.
Thankfully, if I did not put my side of the story in words, I would have won the case. I’m glad I started writing. Writing helps me to express my self better than talking. When I write I think harder and I get to have the time to think of a word that expresses my self the best.