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  1. aleycris
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    Would you correct this narration for me?

    Hi, it's me again. Now I wrote a narration to practice other topic. Wouldyou correct it?

    Regards
    Alejandro

    Reason and purpose: Narration about What made the people decide to learn a foreign language?

    The are various reasons why people learn foreign languages. I think that depends on their or depends on whether they need to speak other languages.
    From my point of view, the job is the main reason why the people decide to learn another language. Nowadays, it is very important to know another language, likes English, because the information of the last product are in English , so if are looking for some important information about a product that you need, for example a new software, you need to know that language to understand the mining of that information or you must wait for few months to get that information in your native language. A part from that, I know people who learn languages because it is a hobby for them and they enjoy learning it. Another reason why people learn languages is in other to get more skills, because if you have more skills you would have more possibilities to get a better job.
    On the whole, I think that people learn other languages because they believe that it will be useful for them.

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    • Reason and purpose: Narration about What made the people decide to learn a foreign language?

      The are various reasons why people learn foreign languages. I think that depends on their or depends on whether they need to speak other languages.
      From my point of view, the job is the main reason why the people decide to learn another language. Nowadays, it is very important to know another language, likes English, because the information of the last product are in English , so if are looking for some important information about a product that you need, for example a new software, you need to know that language to understand the mining of that information or you must wait for few months to get that information in your native language. A part from that, I know people who learn languages because it is a hobby for them and they enjoy learning it. Another reason why people learn languages is in other to get more skills, because if you have more skills you would have more possibilities to get a better job.
      On the whole, I think that people learn other languages because they believe that it will be useful for them.


    Reason and purpose: Narration about what makes people decide to learn a foreign language?

    Perhaps even better: "Why do people decide to learn a foreign language?"

    The are various reasons why people learn foreign languages. I think that depends on their...

    Their what? Needs? Desires? Wishes? It might work better if after the first sentence you simply list the reasons.

    From my point of view, their job is the main reason why people decide to learn another language.

    You might want to replace From my point of view with I think, thereby using fewer words. You might also want to replace another language with a second language or a foreign language.

    Nowadays, it is very important to know a second language, like English.

    I am afraid I don't understand the rest of that sentence, especially the information of the last product and the mining of that information.

    More later.

    :)

  3. aleycris
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    Sorry,
    When I said Inforamtion I'm trying to said data or something like this. Suppose you need to know what is the function of some botton in your tape recorder, so you looking on the manual for some information about data.
    And mining if a typing mistake, is meaning.

    I don't know is information is the right word, but I don't have other word in my mind.

    Regards.
    Alejandro

  4. aleycris
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    The are various reasons why people learn foreign languages. I think that depends on their... 
    
    Their what? Needs? Desires? Wishes? It might work better if after the first sentence you simply list the reasons
    Sorry I eat a word, is "their jobs"

    Regards

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    Quote Originally Posted by aleycris
    Sorry,
    When I said Inforamtion I'm trying to said data or something like this. Suppose you need to know what is the function of some botton in your tape recorder, so you looking on the manual for some information about data.
    And mining if a typing mistake, is meaning.

    I don't know is information is the right word, but I don't have other word in my mind.
    How about this:

    • When a new American product is first released the instructions are always in English. So if you want to be able to use the product when it first comes out you have to be able to understand English. Otherwise you can't understand the instructions.

      Apart from that, some people choose to learn languages for the enjoyment of it. Mainly tho, I think people learn new languages because it helps them with their job.


    What do you think?

    :)

  6. aleycris
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    Hi RonBee,
    I think is good. And what do you think about the last part?

    Cheers
    Alejandro

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    Quote Originally Posted by aleycris
    Hi RonBee,
    I think is good. And what do you think about the last part?
    You mention employment twice. You might want to put those comments in the same paragraph, and also you might want to mention a couple of different ways learning languages can help a person on the job or help that person to get a particular job (for example, making business contacts).

    What do you think?

    Are there reasons you haven't mentioned that a person might want or need to learn a new language?

    :)

  8. aleycris
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    Sorry RonBee but I don't undestand what you said?
    I don't have a good day. :(
    Could you give some example?
    And the rest of the narration i good gor you?.

    Cheers

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    Quote Originally Posted by aleycris
    Sorry RonBee but I don't undestand what you said?
    I don't have a good day. :(
    Could you give some example?
    And the rest of the narration i good gor you?.
    You want to put discussion of the same subject in the same paragraph and discussion of different subjects in different paragraphs. For example, if the subject is work (job, employment) put that in the same paragraph.

    Another reason a person might want or need to learn a new language is that he is planning to move to or already has moved to a new country.

    While "I don't have a good day" is indeed a grammatical sentence, it is not an English expression. Say I am not having a good day. (Sorry to hear that.)

    I can give you some examples if I am sure of what you want examples of.

    The essay is not altogether bad. It just needs a little work.

    How are we doing?

    :)

  10. aleycris
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    Well RonBee, I get your idea and I correct the esay.
    Waht do you thing about that?

    The are various reasons why people learn foreign languages. I think that depends on their jobs or depends on whether they need to speak other languages.
    From my point of view, the job is the main reason why the people decide to learn a foreign language. Nowadays, it is very important to know a second language, like English, because when a new American product is first released the instructions are always in English. So if you want to be able to use the product when it first comes out you have to be able to understand English. Otherwise you can't understand the instructions.
    A part from that, I know people who learn languages because it is a hobby for them and they enjoy learning it. Another reason why people learn languages is in other to get more skills, because if you have more skills you would have more possibilities to get a better job.
    On the whole, I think that people learn other languages because they believe that it will be useful for them.

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