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    kltakky Guest

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    Dear teachers,

    Sorry if you read this message twice from me, because i can't find the first post in the forum.

    Just would like you to check the following sentence:

    Employee hereinafter refers to Employee who experiences first-time employment whereby he/she has not previously registered to the Employee Provident Fund.

    Please help to correct the structure and grammar.

    Your help is truly valued.
    THANK YOU VERY MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :P

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    Employee hereinafter refers to Employee who experiences first-time employment whereby he/she has not previously registered to the Employee Provident Fund
    I think a comma after the second employee would help a little, but it would not help nearly enough. That sentence is just too confusing. I suggest that you start over from the beginning.

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