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    Default business letter sample sentences

    No problem in the following two sentences?
    1. There is no change in the management and the
    type of business we have been engaged in.
    2. A great deal of that success, we are certain,
    has been achieved under your strong leadership
    and fine personality.
    Thank you.

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    Gramatically they seem to be OK. The usage or word choice in the second one however is a little odd... just a little stilted to a native speaker. I'd suggest:
    2. A great deal of that success, we are certain,
    has been achieved [s]under[/s] thanks to your strong leadership
    and [s]fine personality[/s] personal style.

    "Fine personality" is a bit effusive. And it's not clear what about the person's personality the writer is trying to praise so it's difficult to choose a good adjective for "personality."

    Of course these are sylistic changes so you can take them or leave them.

    Hope that helps.

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    Oops, check that, there is a mistake in the first sentence.

    1. There is no change in the management and the
    type of business we have been engaged in.

    Present perfect is probably a better tense to go with because it is used later in the relative clause. "There has been..."

    Also, change the conjunction to "or" because "management" and "type of business" are distinct things and neither one has changed.

    There has been no change in the management or the type of business we have been engaged in.

    Hope that helps.
    Last edited by RonC; 30-Jun-2005 at 03:51.

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    Thank you very much for the detailed explanation and suggestions. I appreciate your effort very much.

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