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    Fitades is offline Newbie
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    Default Could you please proofread my cover lettre

    Hi,
    I have some concern about wordings not being appropriate, too informal for a cover letter. I've underlined them.

    Any hint will be welcomed!
    ---------------------
    Dear Ms x,

    Herein I express my interest in discussing a possible position in [agency name]. My web job hunting brought me to the 'asp.NET developer' web page of your agency. Working as a web developer at [agency name] sounds very appealing, and I am confident that my education and motivation will make me a candidate worth considering.

    My unique mix of previous work and life experiences have convince me that software development is the career option that would bring me the most satisfaction. I am currently on a training course on .NET framework in Bruxelles.

    With a degree in Electronics Engineering and a strong interest in technology, I have an sound technical background. I demonstrate a capacity to work both as an individual and a committed team member. As a result of my experience and education, I believe I am able to contribute the following qualities:
    -A very good knowledge of web technologies (XHTML, CSS, Javascript, XML)
    -A good knowledge of .NET technologies (C#, Winforms, ASP.NET, ADO.NET, T-SQL)
    -Very good communication skills due to my various positions as an educator
    -Competence in tackling problems and willingness to take responsibility
    -Keen openness towards continuous learning of new technologies

    I enclose my curriculum vitae for your kind consideration and look forward to hearing from you soon.

    Yours sincerely,
    [my name]

    P.S. : There is no inconvenience in making myself available before the end of the training course.

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    albertino is offline Senior Member
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    Default Re: Could you please proofread my cover lettre

    Quote Originally Posted by Fitades View Post
    Hi,
    I have some concern about wordings not being appropriate, too informal for a cover letter. I've underlined them.

    Any hint will be welcomed!
    ---------------------
    Dear Ms x,

    Herein I express my interest in discussing a possible position in [agency name]. My web job hunting has brought me to the 'asp.NET developer' web page of your agency. Working as a web developer at [agency name] sounds very appealing, I am confident that my education and motivation will make me a candidate worth considering.

    My unique mix of previous work and life experiences has convinced me that software development is the career option that would bring me the most satisfaction. I am currently on a training course on .NET framework in Bruxelles.

    With a degree in Electronics Engineering and a strong interest in technology, I have a sound technical background. I demonstrate a capacity to work as both an individual and a committed team member. As a result of my experience and education, I believe I am able to contribute the following qualities:
    -A very good knowledge of web technologies (XHTML, CSS, Javascript, XML)
    -A good knowledge of .NET technologies (C#, Winforms, ASP.NET, ADO.NET, T-SQL)
    -Very good communication skills because of my various positions as an educator
    -Competence in tackling problems and willingness to take responsibility
    -Keen openness towards continuous learning of new technologies

    I enclose my curriculum vitae for your kind consideration and look forward to hearing from you soon.

    Yours sincerely,
    [my name]

    P.S. : There is no inconvenience in making myself available before the end of the training course.
    (Not a teacher)
    Wish you success.

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