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    Paragraph correction

    Now-a-days, the seating arrangement in some of the buses is made similar to that of trains. Each pair of seats is arranged facing another pair. I don't like to sit in a seat that's in the opposite direction of the movement of bus. I feel dizzy.

    Can someone please tell me if the above paragraph sounds natural?

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    Re: Paragraph correction

    Quote Originally Posted by daemon99 View Post
    Now-a-days, the seating arrangement in some of the buses is made similar to that of trains. Each pair of seats is arranged facing another pair. I don't like to sit in a seat that's in the opposite direction of the movement of bus. I feel dizzy.

    Can someone please tell me if the above paragraph sounds natural?
    Not a teacher.
    Since I have lived in VN all my life, I myself wish to obtain that " natural way" in writing as well as in speaking English, but I will try to give a hand in the meantime ..
    NOWADAYS,...FACING ANOTHER. I DON'T LIKE...THAT'S IN THE DIRECTION OPPOSITE THE MOVEMENT..."
    I THINK YOURS IS VERY GOOD TO ME THOUGH.

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    Re: Paragraph correction

    Quote Originally Posted by daemon99 View Post
    Now-a-days, the seating arrangement in some of the buses is made similar to that of trains. Each pair of seats is arranged facing another pair. I don't like to sit in a seat that's in the opposite direction of the movement of bus. I feel dizzy.

    Can someone please tell me if the above paragraph sounds natural?
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    (1) You have written a very nice paragraph.

    (2) I suggest only a few little changes:

    Nowadays [it has become one word] [probably no comma is

    needed] the seating arrangement on [I prefer it to "in"] some

    buses is similar to that on trains: Each pair of seats faces the other pair.

    [I used a colon to introduce the explanation. You used a period and a

    new sentence. That's fine, too. I think that a colon is more "dramatic"

    and "tighter" writing. But that is only a personal choice.] I do not like to

    ride backwards, [you may omit the comma, but I personally would include

    it to prevent any misunderstanding] because it makes me dizzy.

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    Thanks a lot, Parser!

    I do not like to ride backwards...
    But if I had to use the word direction, how should I put it?

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    Re: Paragraph correction

    Quote Originally Posted by daemon99 View Post
    Thanks a lot, Parser!



    But if I had to use the word direction, how should I put it?
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    (1) I do not know.

    (2) Maybe (maybe!!!):

    I do not like sitting/to sit in a seat facing the opposite direction.

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