[Grammar] Paragraph correction

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daemon99

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Now-a-days, the seating arrangement in some of the buses is made similar to that of trains. Each pair of seats is arranged facing another pair. I don't like to sit in a seat that's in the opposite direction of the movement of bus. I feel dizzy.

Can someone please tell me if the above paragraph sounds natural?
 

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Now-a-days, the seating arrangement in some of the buses is made similar to that of trains. Each pair of seats is arranged facing another pair. I don't like to sit in a seat that's in the opposite direction of the movement of bus. I feel dizzy.

Can someone please tell me if the above paragraph sounds natural?
Not a teacher.
Since I have lived in VN all my life, I myself wish to obtain that " natural way" in writing as well as in speaking English, but I will try to give a hand in the meantime ..
NOWADAYS,...FACING ANOTHER. I DON'T LIKE...THAT'S IN THE DIRECTION OPPOSITE THE MOVEMENT..."
I THINK YOURS IS VERY GOOD TO ME THOUGH.
 

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Now-a-days, the seating arrangement in some of the buses is made similar to that of trains. Each pair of seats is arranged facing another pair. I don't like to sit in a seat that's in the opposite direction of the movement of bus. I feel dizzy.

Can someone please tell me if the above paragraph sounds natural?

NOT A TEACHER


(1) You have written a very nice paragraph.

(2) I suggest only a few little changes:

Nowadays [it has become one word] [probably no comma is

needed] the seating arrangement on [I prefer it to "in"] some

buses is similar to that on trains: Each pair of seats faces the other pair.

[I used a colon to introduce the explanation. You used a period and a

new sentence. That's fine, too. I think that a colon is more "dramatic"

and "tighter" writing. But that is only a personal choice.] I do not like to

ride backwards, [you may omit the comma, but I personally would include

it to prevent any misunderstanding] because it makes me dizzy.
 

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Thanks a lot, Parser!

I do not like to ride backwards...

But if I had to use the word direction, how should I put it?
 

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Thanks a lot, Parser!



But if I had to use the word direction, how should I put it?

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(1) I do not know.

(2) Maybe (maybe!!!):

I do not like sitting/to sit in a seat facing the opposite direction.
 
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