to help themselves.
* And you have not addressed this question:
+ Do you think rich countries should pay poorer countries for the people they encourage to come?
You essay has a few grammatical errors and expression errors. You make some sweeping statements. You should make use of works like "maybe, perhaps, it is my opinion ..." to give yourself a leeway.
Think deep to the core and don't just touch the surface of the problem. Express yourself more clearly. Good luck!
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