I would leave out distinct because it doesn't really add anything. As a rule, it's always better to use one really descriptive adjective than to use three "average" ones.Originally Posted by hookeba
This is fine. It's a good verb that clearly gets your point across."to crave knowledge" --> Is "crave" OK ?
I wouldn't use fashion because I think it's used more for clothing. Trend would be better."a well-known fashion called career preparation" --> "fashion" ? Or "concept" or "trend" ?
Hmmm...I don't really like this, but that's just my opinion. Can you think of another verb that will communicate your point more clearly?"to harvest knowledge" --> Is "harvest" OK ?
Yes, overlook would be better. Oversee has more to do with supervision, such as what a construction foreman does with his employees."can't oversee the factor that..." --> would "overlook" be better ?
Leaps and bounds is a bit hackneyed. I'd say something like, "Progress has been impressive.""progress has been by leaps and bounds" --> does it sound OK ?
If not mention is awkward. Try "if I didn't mention..." or "if I failed to mention...""Itíll be a complete loss if not mention sth" --> "if not mention" ?
I would punctuate this sentence as follows: "The new sense of freedom a young man can experience--or thinks he will--is thought of as something of great importance." You could also use commas in place of the dashes. I think this sentence could be worded a little better. All this is saying is that young men think personal freedom is important."the new sense of freedom and independence a young man can experience or thinks he will is thought of as sth of great importance" --> can't understand it! Need clarifying!