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    Default Are they a bit awkward or not ?

    I'm a Vietnamese student, so I'm not sure if these expressions seem natural or weird. Would you please check them for me ? I would be very grateful!

    "a distinct, respected, well-paid profession" --> "distinct" ?

    "to crave knowledge" --> Is "crave" OK ?

    "a well-known fashion called career preparation" --> "fashion" ? Or "concept" or "trend" ?

    "to harvest knowledge" --> Is "harvest" OK ?

    "can't oversee the factor that..." --> would "overlook" be better ?

    "progress has been by leaps and bounds" --> does it sound OK ?

    "Itíll be a complete loss if not mention sth" --> "if not mention" ?

    "the new sense of freedom and independence a young man can experience or thinks he will is thought of as sth of great importance" --> can't understand it! Need clarifying!

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    Default Re: Are they a bit awkward or not ?

    Quote Originally Posted by hookeba
    "a distinct, respected, well-paid profession" --> "distinct" ?
    I would leave out distinct because it doesn't really add anything. As a rule, it's always better to use one really descriptive adjective than to use three "average" ones.

    "to crave knowledge" --> Is "crave" OK ?
    This is fine. It's a good verb that clearly gets your point across.

    "a well-known fashion called career preparation" --> "fashion" ? Or "concept" or "trend" ?
    I wouldn't use fashion because I think it's used more for clothing. Trend would be better.

    "to harvest knowledge" --> Is "harvest" OK ?
    Hmmm...I don't really like this, but that's just my opinion. Can you think of another verb that will communicate your point more clearly?

    "can't oversee the factor that..." --> would "overlook" be better ?
    Yes, overlook would be better. Oversee has more to do with supervision, such as what a construction foreman does with his employees.

    "progress has been by leaps and bounds" --> does it sound OK ?
    Leaps and bounds is a bit hackneyed. I'd say something like, "Progress has been impressive."

    "Itíll be a complete loss if not mention sth" --> "if not mention" ?
    If not mention is awkward. Try "if I didn't mention..." or "if I failed to mention..."

    "the new sense of freedom and independence a young man can experience or thinks he will is thought of as sth of great importance" --> can't understand it! Need clarifying!
    I would punctuate this sentence as follows: "The new sense of freedom a young man can experience--or thinks he will--is thought of as something of great importance." You could also use commas in place of the dashes. I think this sentence could be worded a little better. All this is saying is that young men think personal freedom is important.

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    Default Re: Are they a bit awkward or not ?

    Thanks a lot! Now I'm able to improve my writing a little.

    You're very KIND, indeed!

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