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    So I'm wanting to have a career as a butler/footman and want to write a letter to the Butler and Footman department at Buckingham Palace asking for advice on which is the best route to get there. However, I am getting a bit stuck on how to word it. Here is what I have so far:

    Dear Sir or Madam,

    I am writing this letter to ask for advice on how to become a footman or butler as
    I am interested in having a career in this field and my aspiration is to one day work at Buckingham Palace.
    This summer, I left school with 8 qualifications including a GCSE in Hospitality at Grade B and I am now studying towards a diploma in Hospitality Management as well as an NVQ in Food and Drink Service at my local further education college.

    Does that sound good? How can I improve or add to it? Thank you if you can help me

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    Default Re: How to write a letter asking for advice

    Quote Originally Posted by james1994 View Post
    So I'm wanting to have a career as a butler/footman and want to write a letter to the Butler and Footman department at Buckingham Palace asking for advice on which is the best route to get there. However, I am getting a bit stuck on how to word it. Here is what I have so far:

    Dear Sir or Madam,

    I am writing this letter to ask for advice on how to become a footman or butler as
    I am interested in having a career in this field and my aspiration is to one day work at Buckingham Palace.
    This summer, I left school with 8 qualifications including a GCSE in Hospitality at Grade B and I am now studying towards a diploma in Hospitality Management as well as an NVQ in Food and Drink Service at my local further education college.

    Does that sound good? How can I improve or add to it? Thank you if you can help me

    ***** A NON-TEACHER'S OPINION *****


    James,

    (1) You have written a very nice letter.

    (2) I respectfully suggest that you wait until the end before you tell

    them about your dream to work at the Palace. It is more "dramatic"

    that way.

    (3) In the United States, no one starts a letter anymore with "Dear

    Sir or Madam." Do they still use that term in your country? Or is there

    some other respectful greeting that you can use?

    (4) I would respectfully suggest something like:

    Dear Sir/Madam,

    I have just left school with 8 qualifications, including a GCSE in

    Hospitality at Grade B. I am currently studying towards a

    diploma in Hospitality Management as well as an NVQ in

    Food and Service Drink. [It is not necessary to tell them where

    you are studying -- unless it is a famous school with a wonderful

    reputation that would impress the person reading your letter.]

    I aspire to become a footman or butler, with a dream of one

    day working at Buckingham Palace. I should very much appreciate

    any advice that you could give me on how to enter this field.

    James, I wish you the best of luck. I hope that one day you will indeed

    have the honor of working at the Palace.


    Thank you

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