Results 1 to 6 of 6
  1. #1
    AlinaB is offline Newbie
    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • Other
      • Native Language:
      • Romanian
      • Home Country:
      • Romania
      • Current Location:
      • Romania
    Join Date
    Nov 2010
    Posts
    8
    Post Thanks / Like

    need a review form a native English speaker

    Hello everybody,

    I need help with one of my articles I'm writing for suite101.com. My editor asked me to obtain a review from a native English speaker, to improve the article quality and get rid off the awkward words or phrases. Can you help me? I can not post my article here. It has more than 500 words. If you are willing to help me, please let me know.

    Many thanks.
    Alina

  2. #2
    AlinaB is offline Newbie
    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • Other
      • Native Language:
      • Romanian
      • Home Country:
      • Romania
      • Current Location:
      • Romania
    Join Date
    Nov 2010
    Posts
    8
    Post Thanks / Like

    Re: need a review form a native English speaker

    Thank you for your answer. I will try to post my article in 3 parts. My article is currently off-line pending more style corrections.I hope it is safe to put it here...

    Best Ski Resorts for Christmas and Winter Vacation

    Prepare yourself for a special winter holiday. Choose from the best ski resorts in the world to spend Christmas or winter vacation with your family.

    A ski resorts is the perfect place for you to spend a white Christmas. Your family will be happy skiing, ice skating or just playing in the snow. If you’ve barely practiced winter sports until now, here is your chance to get really good at it. No matter where you live, you will surely find one ski destination fairly close to your surroundings. Everybody has a favorite one, but, this year, you could even go to some new place pointed down on your map. Check out the following list and choose your brand new destination. Don’t just look for skiing opportunities, discover after-skiing delights, dining places or activities you might try when you want to skip a day on the slopes.
    Breckenridge, Colorado, United States
    The best thing about Breckenridge Ski Resort is the Imperial Express. This is the highest chair lift in North America, and it takes riders at almost 13.000 feet over the sea level. The panoramic view astounds all tourists. You can see the town of Breckenridge, Baldy Mountain, Lake Dillon and even Keystone Ski Resort. Only advanced and expert skiers should have the courage to try Peak’s 8 slopes.
    Even though you are not an experienced ski rider, you will surely find something to do. According to Ski Magazine, Breckenridge Ski Resort opened the Gold Runner this fall - a 2.500-foot long alpine coaster. Take a ride and have fun with the whole family.
    Breckenridge Ski Resort has many options for fun activities. Those who want to feel a real North Pole adventure must try dog sledding with Siberian Huskies. If you’ve had enough skiing or snowboarding for one day, you can take a step back in time and learn about the history of the town only by strolling down the Main Street

    Big White, British Columbia, Canada
    Big White Ski Resort will enchant expert skiers. Canadians speak with pride about their famous resort. It has hundreds of acres of skiable land and quite impressive slopes. Yet, snow is Big White’s motto. The resort boasts with an average of 750 cm (24.5 feet) of its annual snowfall. However, there are many other reasons to choose Big White. The resort official web pagegives you 10 reasons to go there, especially if you have kids. The Kids’ Centre is one big playground and guarantees an eventless vacation for the parents as well.
    If you are young and looking for adventure, Big White has something in for you too. Snow tubing, ice skating, snowmobile rides, sleigh rides in wilderness or night skiing are its main attractions.

  3. #3
    AlinaB is offline Newbie
    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • Other
      • Native Language:
      • Romanian
      • Home Country:
      • Romania
      • Current Location:
      • Romania
    Join Date
    Nov 2010
    Posts
    8
    Post Thanks / Like

    Re: need a review form a native English speaker

    second part of best ski resorts article

    Chamonix, France
    In Chamonix, you can ski no matter the weather conditions. This resort has 11 separate ski areas, available for all types of winter sports: skiing, snowboarding and off-track skiing. There are many choices for those who feel adventurous, too, the notorious slopes of Mont Blanc await. Try off-track skiing, hang gliding and ice climbing on glaciers. However, if the weather is bad, and you are not looking for extreme skiing, you can always choose the family resort Les Houches, a small town in the Charmonix valley. “Afternoons can be spent at the husky dog park, goat farm, mountain railways and a tree-top adventure playground”, writes Gemma Bows in the January 16, 2010, The Guardian article "Family friendly ski resorts" .
    Kitzbuhel, Austria
    For more than a century,Kitzbuhel has been presented on the world’s ski map as an exquisite location. The best skiers come to compete every year on Streif, which is the most difficult downhill run in the world. Thousands of tourists come to see the contest, and you should better avoid Kitzbuhel in January, if you plan to spend your holidays quietly.
    In Kitzbuhel, you can opt for elegant hotels or cozy guesthouses as accommodation. You will appreciate their unique combination of historic architecture and modern services.
    Kitzbuhel is both a charming alpine village and an up-to-date ski resort. Skiing is the main sport, but you can also try ice curling, the mini bob or sledging on excellent toboggans. If this is your first vacation in a ski resort, you will also find instructors to teach you how to ski.

  4. #4
    AlinaB is offline Newbie
    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • Other
      • Native Language:
      • Romanian
      • Home Country:
      • Romania
      • Current Location:
      • Romania
    Join Date
    Nov 2010
    Posts
    8
    Post Thanks / Like

    Re: need a review form a native English speaker

    Thank you very much for your suggestions. I believe I’ve made some of them because I usually create my ideas in Romanian and not in English. I will make some changes and hope my text will look better.
    I still need one more piece of advice...Do you think I need more adjectives or more elaborate words in my text? What can I do to learn more about writing with style. I believe this will come after years of writing in English, but I still need some quick tips.
    I love writing. I’m currently a news editor for a radio station in Bucharest and I enjoy what I do. I also want to be a better writer ...in English.

  5. #5
    AlinaB is offline Newbie
    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • Other
      • Native Language:
      • Romanian
      • Home Country:
      • Romania
      • Current Location:
      • Romania
    Join Date
    Nov 2010
    Posts
    8
    Post Thanks / Like

    Re: need a review form a native English speaker

    Thank you very much for your posts. You are a huge help for me. I will follow your tips and I will try to read more (thanks for the suggestions). I’ll keep you updated and I’ll tell you if my article is online again.

    I am a journalist and I know how important is to give correct information. I’ve started writing for suite101 in July, and I realised it is a big difference between editing news (in Romanian) and online writing in a foreign language.

    Thanks again,
    Alina

  6. #6
    AlinaB is offline Newbie
    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • Other
      • Native Language:
      • Romanian
      • Home Country:
      • Romania
      • Current Location:
      • Romania
    Join Date
    Nov 2010
    Posts
    8
    Post Thanks / Like

    Smile Re: need a review form a native English speaker

    My article about Best Ski Resorts is back on-line. Thank you for your help. Your suggestions were great.

Similar Threads

  1. [General] The narrator is native english speaker?
    By EngFan in forum Pronunciation and Phonetics
    Replies: 3
    Last Post: 05-Nov-2010, 15:36
  2. [General] Native english speaker or not ???
    By EngFan in forum Pronunciation and Phonetics
    Replies: 11
    Last Post: 15-Oct-2010, 13:50
  3. Is it fluent English by native speaker?
    By NewHope in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 2
    Last Post: 16-Sep-2006, 07:12
  4. A native English speaker?
    By NewHope in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 3
    Last Post: 09-May-2005, 01:28

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •