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Prompt: "You Can Leave home all you want, but home Will Never Leave You."
Tate's statement suggests that "home" may be conceived of as a dwelling, a place, or a state of mind. one may have positive or negative associations, but in either case, it may have a considerable influence on an individual.
Choose a novel or play in which a central character finds that home remains significant Leaves home yet. Write a well-developed essay in which you analyze the importance of "home" to this character and the Reasons for its continuing influence. Explain how the idea of the home's character illuminates the meaning of the larger work.
Choose a work from the list below or another appropriate novel or play of literary merit comparable. Do not merely summarize the plot.
Destructive love is a happy illusion with an unfortunate ending. In The Great Gatsby, F. Scott Fitzgerald displays Gatsby’s old flame, Daisy as his “home”, causing him to endure great pain. Gatsby attempts to revive the past romance he and Daisy had, but her rejection to his compelling love for Daisy makes him miserable. Additionally, Gatsby’s selfless action to save Daisy out of her troubles led to his ultimate sacrifice. Therefore, “home” has a significant impact on Gatsby.
Gatsby’s “home” started out in Louisville, where the two had fallen in love. Though they swore an oath to wait for Gatsby to finish fighting in the war for the two to get married, Daisy grew impatient and married Tom Buchanan, an affluent aristocrat. Seeing how Daisy was in love with money, Gatsby attempted to win her heart by becoming rich; hoping to impress her with his immense wealth and to get a chance to be with her, Gatsby threw extravagant parties in her presence and showed her the most luxurious parts of his gigantic mansion. His plan seemed to work. Daisy did grow some interest in Gatsby and accepted his every invitation to meet him at his house. However, no matter how hard Gatsby tried to please Daisy, she rejected him by choosing Tom over Gatsby because she “would be lying” if she said she “never loved” Tom. Heartbroken and desperate for the old amorous relationship, Jay Gatsby tried to express his compelling feelings for her by protecting her; for example, Gatsby stood outside her house for several hours to make sure Tom doesn’t physically abuse her. Such destructive love of Jay Gatsby had for Daisy Buchannan shows that it did not lead to a fortunate ending for Gatsby.
Not only was Gatsby heart-broken, but also, he had to pay a great price for protecting Daisy from getting in trouble for her sins. One day, Gatsby, Daisy, Tom, and Daisy’s friends went to the city. Gatsby was once again happy to spend time with Daisy. Suspicious of the two, Tom decided to test Daisy who she will choose to love. So Tom let Gatsby sit with Daisy alone in the car while he took Jordan Baker and Nick Carraway with him. After Jordan Baker and Nick Carraway went inside Tom’s car, they went to Wilson’s garage only to discover that George Wilson has learned about his wife’s affair with an “unidentified man”. Meanwhile, on the border of valley of ashes, Myrtle, Tom’s lover, was hit by Gatsby’s car, which Daisy was driving. Scared of the consequences, Daisy did not know what to do; to express his deep feelings for Daisy, Gatsby took the blame for her actions. George Wilson, who knew it was Gatsby’s car, assumed that Myrtle’s lover killed her, thinking that Gatsby was her lover. Angry and upset about her death, George vowed revenge on the murderer. Gatsby’s selfless act led to a bigger sacrifice: his death; George Wilson shot Gatsby when the rich man was swimming in his pool. Gatsby’s unrequited love for Daisy proved that he was willing to sacrifice anything for her, even to the point of death. Gatsby’s desire for Daisy showed that his love was destructive. It destroyed his life. In the end, Gatsby felt pain with the fact that he ended his life with a sense of emptiness, having lived a life without Daisy’s love.
F. Scott Fitzgerald shows that “home” can negatively impact one’s life in a significant way. Gatsby’s destructive love for his lover who once loved him five years ago brought him pain with her refusal to leave her husband to be with him. Though he was happy to spend time with Daisy, he had faced the greatest misery of his life. His selfless action to save Daisy from the consequences of automobile homicide by taking the blame had taken his life and made him feel incomplete without love from the person he loved most. Clearly, the author illustrates his point: insidious love can ruin one’s life into rubbles.