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    e-mail correct?

    Hello!
    Is this paragraph correct please?
    Thanks!!


    Dear Sir,
    I would like to call you in order to ask few questions regarding the e-mail that I received yesterday from the Human Resources Specialist .

    Please, when it would be convenient for you?
    Thanks in advance.
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    Re: e-mail correct?

    Quote Originally Posted by verite1987 View Post
    Hello!
    Is this paragraph correct please?
    Thanks!!


    Dear Sir,
    I would like to call you in order to ask few questions reading the e-mail that I received yesterday from the Human Resources Specialist .

    Please, when it would be convenient for you?
    Thanks in advance.
    My suggested edits:

    Dear Sir,
    I would like to call you in order to ask a few questions regarding the e-mail that I received yesterday from the Human Resources Specialist.

    Please let me know when it would be convenient for you.

    Thanks in advance,
    (Your Name)

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    Re: e-mail correct?

    very nice...

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    Re: e-mail correct?

    My suggestion:

    Dear [RECEIVER'S NAME],

    I would like to discuss with you regarding the E-mail which was sent to me by the 'Human Resources Specialist' yesterday; my preference goes to have a phone conversation.

    I will appreciate it indeed if you let me know that according to your convenience, when we can discuss about it.

    Best regards / [YOURNAME].

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    Re: e-mail correct?

    Quote Originally Posted by MegaEriable View Post
    My suggestion:

    Dear [RECEIVER'S NAME],

    I would like to discuss with you regarding the E-mail which was sent to me by the 'Human Resources Specialist' yesterday; my preference goes to have a phone conversation.

    I will appreciate it indeed if you let me know that according to your convenience, when we can discuss about it.

    Best regards / [YOURNAME].
    Hello Mega,
    I'm sorry, but this is not natural. The suggestions give prior to yours is fine. The parts I've put into italics are problems in your suggestion.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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