e-mail correct?

[verite1987]

Hello!
Is this paragraph correct please?
Thanks!!


[FONT=&quot]Dear Sir, [/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]I would like to call you in order to ask few questions regarding the e-mail that I received [/FONT][FONT=&quot]yesterday [/FONT][FONT=&quot]from the Human Resources Specialist .
[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Please, when it would be convenient for you? [/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Thanks in advance. [/FONT]

 

[acslater017]

Hello!
Is this paragraph correct please?
Thanks!!


[FONT=&quot]Dear Sir, [/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]I would like to call you in order to ask few questions reading the e-mail that I received [/FONT][FONT=&quot]yesterday [/FONT][FONT=&quot]from the Human Resources Specialist .
[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Please, when it would be convenient for you? [/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Thanks in advance. [/FONT]

My suggested edits:

Dear Sir,
I would like to call you in order to ask a few questions regarding the e-mail that I received yesterday from the Human Resources Specialist.

Please let me know when it would be convenient for you.

Thanks in advance,
(Your Name)

 

[hejazei]

very nice...

 

[MegaEriable]

My suggestion:

Dear [RECEIVER'S NAME],

I would like to discuss with you regarding the E-mail which was sent to me by the 'Human Resources Specialist' yesterday; my preference goes to have a phone conversation.

I will appreciate it indeed if you let me know that according to your convenience, when we can discuss about it.

Best regards / [YOURNAME].

 

[Barb_D]

My suggestion:

Dear [RECEIVER'S NAME],

I would like to discuss with you regarding the E-mail which was sent to me by the 'Human Resources Specialist' yesterday; my preference goes to have a phone conversation.

I will appreciate it indeed if you let me know that according to your convenience, when we can discuss about it.

Best regards / [YOURNAME].

Hello Mega,
I'm sorry, but this is not natural. The suggestions give prior to yours is fine. The parts I've put into italics are problems in your suggestion.