I read your statement and made a few amendments, I am student so you should still have it proofread by an English teacher. I hope this helps... you are unclear at parts about your research... I think you should also mention specifically what you want to research in paragraph 3. Also, you're missing a conclusion at the end. you could also mention your desired research department in the conclusion.
I was born and raised in a house where critical and systematic thinking is greatly encouraged. My father is a lawyer who is also involved with newspapers and writing. Watching my father practise law, search for facts and deal with varying opinions has made me grow fascinated with the truth behind many events. As a young boy I joined many journalists’ gatherings and participated in their discussions and debates. This greatly helped me develop an analytical view regarding my surroundings, which later on positively affected my academic thinking.
Being passionate about facts, opinions and sources forming the so called truth behind events has led to my admiration of philosophy. The bond between evolutionary genetics, philosophy and a vast variety of other sciences, together with its regard to human life, pulled me in. This consequently led to a sea of knowledge that was yet to be uncovered. There are many unanswered questions along with a world of possibilities. My curiosity and hunger for knowledge drive me to believe that finding an answer to at least one of the mysterious questions is what I should dedicate my career to.
Studying human evolutionary biology should provide me with the necessary tools to investigate many fundamental questions regarding the history, present and future of the human species. I am hoping to be part of many beneficial experiments which will help further enhance our understanding of the human biology. I am greatly motivated by the idea of contributing to the human society and will work to the best of my ability with that in mind.
During my undergraduate studies I was involved in several research projects that equipped me with the essentials of academic research. Most of the projects in which I was involved were about nanotechnology and its application - Amongst them one which was published (where?) under the title of “----”. In total, I received 9000 dollars of research grant (from?). I conducted a couple of other research projects that were about functionalizing carbon nanotubes by DNA and comparing the affect of different nanomaterial on DNA.
In the first project, we tried to increase the functionalization rate of carbon nanotubes by changing the solvent (from what to what?) of carbon nanotube-DNA hybrids. This helps carbon nanotubes become soluble faster and more efficient and ready to be utilized in many applications. In addition to these projects, I joined several national and international conferences and presented some papers in the form of posters (could elaborate briefly). Furthermore, I took part in a few workshops (such as Phylogenetics and Site directed mutagenesis) this generally helped me recognize our potential and also our currently restricting limits in research.