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In “College Lectures: Is Anybody Listening?” David Daniels argues that there are a lot of problems existing in the “lecture system”. According to Daniels, “teachers, it is charged, are not doing a good job of teaching, and students are not doing a good job of learning.” This is a subject paid close attention recently.<-- Who has paid close attention recently? Use a passive here might make your sentence work. e.g., This subject has been given close attention recently. ] Daniels offers an example
fromin Mary. He says that Mary saw there are a hundred sor more students registered in the lecture course; however, she discovered <-- you used saw before with Mary.] that the professor never takes attendance on time. In addition, Mary felt that she wasbored in the lecture sclasses, and other students were “nodding off or doodling in their notebooks.” David Daniels claims that “listening intelligently is a hard work”. Also, that is a problem from thewith lectures, especially, “paying attention is very difficult.” Students are always makingdaydreaming because the professor speaks few words in the class. <-- This is not clear. Do you mean a professor only says a few words during the whole lecture?] He says, “Attending lectures is passive learning.” Therefore, students of “Active learning” are to pay attention to speaker’s next points or take notes in the class. According to Daniels, “Professors can pretend to teach by lecturing just as students can pretend to learn by attending lectures.” Therefore, the lecture system seldom forms interaction between teachers and students. Finally, the smaller classes’ education will immensely improve the students’ listening skills, intellect and thereading comprehension. I think the larger classes may produce a lot of problems more than the small group ingclasses.