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Could you help me with this paragraph?
I am a student writing my personal statement these days. I asked a company to polish my ps. However, there is a paragraph I cannot understand after they polishing it. I wonder if you native English speakers can understand it? Is this the proper expression?
The polished paragraph is
"Move the snowdrift forward then catch the relief supplies to enable Robot EXE to carry the supplies to the worst hit area, then repeat the process until all supplies have been transported. At the completion of the process, EXE finally opens the switch and the power grid starts. "
I want to express that in a competition, my robot moved away the snowdrift, used its arm to catch the relief supplies, and carried the supplies to the worst hit area. It repeatedly carry the supplies to the area. Finally, the robot opened a switch and then the power grid started.
Dose the polished one properly express my idea?
Thank you very much and Merry Christmas!
Quick point. Closing switches turns them on. Open is off.Finally, EXE turned on a switch (In the US we would use "turned on a switch", in other countries, "opened a switch" may be used) to start the power grid.