1) After "He wished to have a son", you could use a colon instead of a comma as you are starting a list and this may help you to use more varied punctuation, which will make your writing more interesting.
2) "...daughters always took care of their parents" should probably be "daughters always TAKE care of their parents".
3) "...loved his daughters greatly" sounds a little bit clumsy. Perhaps you should consider "loved his daughters DEARLY".
4) Instead of using the pluperfect "his prayers HAD been answered", maybe "his prayers WERE answered" would be a better choice to sound more flowing.
5) Instead of "Ivan GAVE a party", it would make more sense to write "Ivan THREW a party".
6) Add an "a" between "..but Jelena was" and "good cook".
7) When you say "...and patted friendly Ivan's children", you are a bit clumsy. Are you trying to say that Ivan was friendly, or that the patting was a friendly gesture?
8) When you say "rotting window frames", you then go on to repeat the adjective. Use a different one, such as "decaying", "decomposing" or "crumbling".
9) Instead of "They discussed about the new furniture...", use "They discussed the new furniture...". If you use discussed, do not use about. Only use about if you use "they talked about...".
10) Instead of "new furniture and new gadgets", remove the second "new" and simply use "new furniture and gadgets".
11) Toward the end of your piece, instead of "they taught him in the school", try "they taught him in school".
12) Before "great leader", add "the" if you are referring directly to a certain person or figure.
Some of these points are somewhat pedantic, but otherwise, the story was very well written and with very few errors. :)
Note: I am not an English teacher.
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