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    ekowbentum is offline Newbie
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    Default concerns addressed

    The concerns have been addressed.Thank you so much.
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    Default Re: Can you please review my statement of purpose for a PhD program

    I don't like it. It is not a creative writing exercise. The reader does not want to be persuaded you're interesting, just that you're interested.

    All you need to do is detail what you have done academically, and what you intend to do. It should be 2 pages A4 or so.

    Also, your reasons are poor. Adjectives and compliments that could conceivably apply to any place do not work in your favour in this type of letter.

    What they really want is someone serious who has done their homework. This means you should know everything about them. The names of their department's professors, what their fields of specialisation are, which of them you'd like to work with and why, based on your intended area of PhD research....

    So I recommend re-writing it, friend.

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    Default Re: Can you please review my statement of purpose for a PhD program

    Good answer, konungursvia.

    Ekowbentum, it's far too long. People reading this application are also faced with dozens of others to get through; it's not a good idea to bore them to tears.

    Separate your paragraphs with an extra space to break up that forbidding solid block of text and avoid over-repetition of your university in the last paragraph.

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