Results 1 to 3 of 3
  1. #1
    Teia is offline Key Member
    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • English Teacher
      • Native Language:
      • Romanian
      • Home Country:
      • Romania
      • Current Location:
      • Romania
    Join Date
    Aug 2006
    Posts
    1,885
    Post Thanks / Like

    Could you help me please?

    Hi


    Could you please help me with the following sentence? I`d like to make it sound better than I tried to do it:

    You get to break his daily routine and mess up his mornings while he is at work, relaxing at home and even when he is asleep.


    The idea is that the character involved ruins somebody`s mornings, work at the office, time of relaxing and even his sleep.

    Thank you so much in advance

  2. #2
    Raymott's Avatar
    Raymott is offline VIP Member
    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • Academic
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • Australia
      • Current Location:
      • Australia
    Join Date
    Jun 2008
    Posts
    20,149
    Post Thanks / Like

    Re: Could you help me please?

    Quote Originally Posted by Teia View Post
    Hi


    Could you please help me with the following sentence? I`d like to make it sound better than I tried to do it:

    You get to break his daily routine and mess up his mornings while he is at work, relaxing at home and even when he is asleep.


    The idea is that the character involved ruins somebody`s mornings, work at the office, time of relaxing and even his sleep.

    Thank you so much in advance
    "You get to break his daily work routine, and mess up his mornings at work. You can't leave him alone when he's relaxing at home, and you even disturb his sleep!"

    There are an infinite number of ways you can say this. If this is dialogue, a long grammatically correct sentence might not be the answer. The repeated use of "you" in the above version fits with the accusatory tone of the sentence (if I've read the mood right).

  3. #3
    5jj's Avatar
    5jj is offline VIP Member
    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • Retired English Teacher
      • Native Language:
      • British English
      • Home Country:
      • England
      • Current Location:
      • Czech Republic
    Join Date
    Oct 2010
    Posts
    28,167
    Post Thanks / Like

    Re: Could you help me please?

    You have posted this question twice. Please do not do this. Double posting can lead to confusuion when different people post answers without knowing what has already been written.

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •