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    Unhappy Please help me to correct grammar of 200words character storyboard!!!

    hi, I was asked to write 200words of 3d character background story. Is there has someone can help me to check it's grammar? i'll be there most part of time, so please, many thanks, liza.
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    3D Character Storyboard
    Name: Robo lili
    Sex: Female
    Age: 6
    Storyboard:

    Robo lili she is only 6 years old, she likes eat lollipop, she is small, but she is very smart principle and loyal. She is good at mathematic calculation. Sometimes people who drive her angry should be very careful, she will shoot them head with her colour marbles in her body!!

    Robo lili is created by his scientist background father “Dr.Kieran”, used his genius creativity and technology acknowledge, who is now teach the artificial intelligence major subject in the college as a sophistic lecture. In a mean while, Lili helps his father do some academic works. She often appearance on the class with his father, stand beside him, assist him to solve different kinds of complicated calculation. As a reward, her father will give her lollipop at the end.

    It is worth mentioning that Robo lili was installed various interesting function by her father. For instant, her legs and hands can become very longer, and her face expression can change dramatically in many different situations, such like her eyes can change bigger and beautiful etc. But in most of time, she looks like very boring, because she needs to do lots repeated jobs, such like calculation.
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    Default Re: Please help me to correct grammar of 200words character storyboard!!!

    Quote Originally Posted by lizawang View Post
    Robo lili she is only 6 years old. She likes to eat lollipops. She is small. She is very smart, principled and loyal. She is good at math. People who make her angry should be very careful because she will shoot them in the head with coloured marbles that shoot out of her body.

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