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    kindaichiXXX is offline Newbie
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    Please check my paragraph

    Hey, can anyone pls check my paragraph?

    Leslie used simple and polite classroom language while giving instructions. For instance, “can I hear your sentences, please?” It is a clear instruction and does not contain complicated lexis. The student whom Lesllie directed the question to understood immediately without any confusion. In addition, the use of modal verb “can” made the instructions seem more “polite”. In the video, when Leslie asked a student to go to the front, she often uses the modal verb “can”. For example, “can you read out your sentences?” and “can you tell me” Polite instructions may alleviate nervousness that some students feel. Students do not feel intimidated. Although some may argue that instructions should be less polite if we expect someone to do it, we should know that we are dealing with students and a softer approach is needed. Leslie realizes this, and does not use forceful language when instructing.
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    Re: Please check my paragraph

    Quote Originally Posted by kindaichiXXX View Post
    Hey, can anyone pls check my paragraph?

    Leslie used simple and polite classroom language while giving instructions. For instance, “can I hear your sentences, please?” It is a clear instruction and does not contain complicated lexis. The student to whom Lesllie directed the question, to understood immediately without any confusion. In addition, the use of modal verb “can” made the instructions seem more “polite”. In the video, when Leslie asked a student to go to the front, she often uses the modal verb “can”. For example, “can you read out your sentences?” and “can you tell me” Polite instructions may alleviate nervousness that some students feel. Students do not feel intimidated. Although some may argue that instructions should be less polite if we expect someone to do it, we should know that we are dealing with students and a softer approach is needed. Leslie realizes this, and does not use forceful language when instructing.
    Nice work. As a minor suggestion, I would rephrase one sentence as above.

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