You will notice that I seem to have made many changes. However, I can understand most of what you are saying and the ideas you are trying to get across, which is important. But many of the sentences have problems with grammar and missing words, and there is a lot of repetition. It is often difficult for someone else to correct all these things while still keeping your 'voice' in the writing. I don't know what you mean by "green zone" in this context so I hope I have understood your meaning there.
In this competitive world time and money can change our lives completely because money is the backbone of our lives and communities. Commodities are like birds, one in the hand is better than hundreds in the tree. We cannot deny that financial issues are vital in any community and so I will divide the people into three groups, the poor, the working class, and businessmen. Businessmen are one of the foundations of any nation and have huge responsibilities. Therefore businessmen should have two fundamental attributes. Firstly, they should deal decently with people and, secondly, they should gain their money in legal ways.
Respect and consideration for the customer is the secret of any successful merchant. For example, if you are a customer and you want to buy something specific and the seller does not have exactly what you want, he can use his skills to attract you to buy another thing – that is called gentle persuasion. If you want to be a good businessman you should be both smart and friendly.
From my viewpoint, the businessman should not do everything just to get money. The businessman must look forward to the future and put himself in a secure position both financially and legally. In business, most people want to accumulate a lot of money, that is true, but I think that besides collecting money the merchant should consider his family, his community and his own heart before joining in any project.
Earning money can be like a disease, but, like anything else, it can and must be done in the right way. In conclusion, the best businessman should act decently and legally to earn both money and respect.
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