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    Lightbulb Please can you check my essay on mistakes, it's urgent

    Kazakh national cuisine reflects the soul of our nation, history, customs and traditions. Its flavor and aroma is unforgettable, this is a taste of Kazakh hospitality. Guests are heartily welcome to our land.
    If you wish to taste the most delicious dishes of Kazakh cuisine restaurant “Zheruik” is the place you are searching for. According to ancient legends and songs of Kazakh akyns, there is an edge of a dream, Kazakh Promised Land – “Zheruyik”. National restaurant-museum “Zheruyik” offers Eastern cuisine with elements of traditional nomad food that has close relation to the richness and uniqueness of Kazakh culture. There are three dining rooms - Kazakh, Asian (Japanese) and European with a top-level service and friendly waiters. You will be delighted with the food, surroundings and the spirit of Kazakh nation that is reflectedin theinterior design ofthe restaurant. They serve tender beshbarmak, a dish consisting of homemade noodles, boiled meat, and bouillon poured over the dish; and crunchy baursaks, small donuts (round or square) fried in deep fat and lots of other national dishes.
    Oriental restaurant “Zheti Kazyna” is ready to please you with its varied cuisine. Kitchen of the restaurant is a mixture of Asian styles: Kazakh, Uighur, Uzbek, Kyrgyz and Chinese. There are many delicious dishes prepared over a hot, open fire, large selection of kebabs. The restaurant has several dining rooms, each decorated so that you will feel like a traveler sitting in traditional Kazakh yurt, a tea house of Samarkand, a Karim restaurant in Delhi, or a Chinese Palace. You will taste kuyrdak, meat cut into pieces, boiled in oil, and served with onion and pepper with refreshing beverage airan, made of sour milk and served in beautiful pialas.
    Another nice place that serves not only national dishes, but also homemade food, known for its cosiness and warmth - a cafe "Alina" is located in the heart of our city. On its first floor there is a dining room with fireplace and bar. On the second floor there are two banquet rooms and a relaxation room with soft furnishings. The café offers dishes of Eastern European, Kazakh and Russian cuisine. In the menu you will enjoy homemade pancakes, different kinds of porridge, cheese cakes and even more.
    No matter where you choose to go one thing is for certain - in our beautiful city you will find a place that will leave pleasant memories for a long time.

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    Default Re: Please can you check my essay on mistakes, it's urgent

    Asanthe.
    Not too many problems, mostly rephrasing things for clarity, but there were also several indefinite and definite articles (a/the) missing. Some of the changes are to make the language more pleasing when you are describing food. For example it sounds better to say "deep-fried" than "fried in deep fat", and rather than say "They serve.." it is more appealing in this case to say "You can order..". I also included a short description of the akyns. I had not heard of them and perhaps many others haven't either. You can decide if you want to leave it in.
    I hope this is helpful.


    Kazakh's national cuisine reflects the soul of our nation, its history, customs and traditions. The flavor and aroma is unforgettable, this is a taste of Kazakh hospitality. Guests are heartily welcomed to our land.
    If you wish to taste the most delicious dishes of a Kazakh cuisine restaurant then “Zheruik” is the place you are searching for. According to the ancient legends and songs of the Kazakh akyns (traditional poets and singers), there at the edge of a dream is the Kazakh Promised Land – “Zheruyik”. The national restaurant-museum “Zheruyik” offers Eastern cuisine with elements of traditional nomad food, that has a close relationship to the richness and uniqueness of Kazakh culture. There are three dining rooms – Kazakh, Asian (Japanese) and European, with top-level service and friendly waiters. You will be delighted with the food, surroundings and spirit of the Kazakh nation that is reflected in the interior design of the restaurant. You can order tender beshbarmak, a dish consisting of homemade noodles, boiled meat, topped off with bouillon; or crunchy baursaks, small deep-fried donuts (round or square) and lots of other national dishes.
    The oriental restaurant “Zheti Kazyna” is ready to please you with its varied cuisine, a mixture of Asian styles: Kazakh, Uighur, Uzbek, Kyrgyz and Chinese. There are many delicious dishes prepared over a hot, open fire with a large selection of kebabs. The restaurant has several dining rooms, each decorated so that you will feel like a traveler sitting in a traditional Kazakh yurt, a tea house of Samarkand, a Karim restaurant in Delhi, or a Chinese Palace. You will taste kuyrdak – meat cut into pieces, boiled in oil, and served with onion and pepper. Try it with airan, a refreshing beverage made from sour milk and served in beautiful pialas.
    Another delightful place that serves not only national dishes but also homemade food, and is known for its cosiness and warmth, is café "Alina", located in the heart of our city. On its first floor there is a dining room with fireplace and bar. On the second floor there are two banquet rooms and a relaxation room with soft furnishings. The café offers dishes of Eastern European, Kazakh and Russian cuisine. On the menu you will find homemade pancakes, different kinds of porridge, cheese cakes and much more to enjoy.
    No matter where you choose to go in our beautiful city one thing is certain, you will find a place that will leave pleasant memories for a long time.

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    Default Re: Please can you check my essay on mistakes, it's urgent

    Thank you!!!!!!!

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