Lots of improvement needed here, anandvibhor. Firstly, what is going on with your punctuation? I see commas everywhere, full stops followed by lowercase letters and multiple cases of ellipses (the dot dot dot '...'). As I am sure you are aware, English sentences begin with capital letters and end with full stops. There are 2 spaces (when typing) following the full stop.
I think you need to get basic punctuation down before you start worrying about other areas of grammar. Come back with a revised version employing proper punctuation and I'm sure someone will be happy to take a good look at it.
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