Save today, save tomorrow

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iamtime

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Hi,

In the context below,

If you consume less fish, birds, and animals, someday you may save the life of others, of your friends, families, siblings, and even of yourselves. Save today, save tomorrow.

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Should I repeat saying 'of your...' like this?

of your friends, of your families, of your siblings

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families or family?

3.
even of yours or even of yourselves?

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For effect, yes, add the word "your" in front of the list.

This would be more effective in a speech or spoken advertising.


Or, omit all the "yours" if used in written advertising.


If you consume less fish, birds, and animals, someday you may save the life of others - your friends, your family, your siblings, and even yourself. Save today, save tomorrow.
 

iamtime

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For effect, yes, add the word "your" in front of the list.

This would be more effective in a speech or spoken advertising.


Or, omit all the "yours" if used in written advertising.


If you consume less fish, birds, and animals, someday you may save the life of others - your friends, your family, your siblings, and even yourself. Save today, save tomorrow.

Thank you so much for correcting it. :-D
 
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