can you add tranitions words to make it make sense?

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julie_loc

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In this article, ” Mom rewards 13-year-old girl for smoking and having sex”, it talks about a mother who rewards her daughter for misbehavior.

Tracy Holt did not punish her daughter Sam (13) for hanging around with her friends in the street, drinking cans of lager and smoking pot. She did not see the point in punishing her, because if she punished her she would be punishing herself. She fears that she'll have to put up with her in the house. Instead, she rewards her by giving her cigarettes.

When Sam told her mother that she had lost her virginity, Tracy was shocked, but did not show her true feelings. She thought she was joking and was disappointed, but she still did not punish her. Instead, she took her to the doctor to put her on the pill and told her to use condoms.
 

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It already makes sense.

What do you mean by tranition or even transition words?
 
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