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    Exclamation Please Mark my LPI Essay (Thank you very much~)

    Why you have chosen your present career path?

    Nowadays, we have a rich and diverse array of career paths to choose. When I migrated to Canada, I decided to have a change in my life so I chose to be a financial advisor in the investment industry. This is a very challenging career because I have an opportunity for personal development because I work closely with people. I have to continue my education to be a licensee. Moreover, I also have an opportunity to create myself.

    As a financial advisor, I have to work closely with people. In order to earn the trust from others, I have to improve my personality. After these many years, I have become a good listener. I am empathy and patient. I look things at their perspective. I am more caring and less self-centered. Because of these personal developments, I have a lot of friends and referrals from my clients.

    I have to write a lot of examinations to become a licensee in this industry. After graduation for almost twenty years, I was so scared and worried to pick up the books again. I had written more than fifteen examinations in the past 10 years. I find that it is a very good exercise for my brain because I have to memorize a lot of information. Because of the continuous professional updates and studies, I am confident with my recommendation to my clients and I will not be panic when they ask me questions. Thus, I believe that learning leads to success.

    Working as a financial advisor, I can create myself because this career provides me the time freedom. I arrange the working hours by booking appointments with clients at my convenience. Therefore, I have time to develop my personal interest in art. When I paint, I am very relaxed and concentrated so this is a very good way for me to release my stress from work. I like this career because it gives me an opportunity of finding myself if I arrange my working hours wisely.

    In conclusion, I am happy that I have chosen to be a financial advisor because I am not just earning my livings, I also have an opportunity for personal development, education development and creating myself.

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    Re: Please Mark my LPI Essay (Thank you very much~)

    Thanks for your comments and prompt reply. I have just posted another essay, please take a look when you have time. Please give me some feedback, so that I can improve my writing skills and be well-prepared for the LPI. Thanks!

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