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    julie_loc is offline Newbie
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    Default can you fix the paragraph?

    I chose this article because I want to convince the federal governments make more money to donate to the health care system. I want to someday be in the medical field so I can help the older people get the kind of medical care they deserve. I want to help lower the cost of medical care and services so that I can keep them alive. The article helps me understand how hard it is too make money. I want to know what is going on in the health care today,

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    Default Re: can you fix the paragraph?

    *just an assistant ESL teacher

    I chose this article because I want to convince the federal governments to make spend more money to donate toimprove the health care system. I want to someday be in the medical field so I can help the older people get the kind of medical care they deserve. I want to help lower the cost of medical care and services so that I can help them live longer liveskeep them alive. The article helps me understand how hard it is too makeraise money. I want to know what is going on in the health care field today.

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