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    can someone edit this?

    This is urgent ,it is due tonight.


    The article basically says vet researchers tested the IQ's of more than 20,000 healthy men between the ages 18 and 21 who are serving in the Israel military or had recently completed their service 28% of the men in this sample small wild 3% were former smokers and 60% had never smoked that average IQ of the smokers were 94 compared with 101 among the non-smokers men who smoked more than a pack of cigarettes a day had an average IQ of 90 although a normal IQ falls between 84 and 116 the difference observed in this study is still quite considered significant!
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    #2

    Re: can someone edit this?

    This is ONE long sentence that makes no sense.

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    #3

    Re: can someone edit this?

    The article basically says vet
    Unnecessary. Omit this.

    Researchers tested the IQ's of more than 20,000 healthy men between the ages 18 and 21 who are serving in the Israel military or had recently completed their service.

    28% of the men in this sample

    small
    smoked

    wild 3% were
    while 3% were

    former smokers and 60% had never smoked.
    N.B. Your figures do not add up to 100%

    that average IQ of the smokers were 94
    Average IQ of the smokers was 94.

    compared with 101 among the non-smokers.

    Men who smoked more than a pack of cigarettes a day had an average IQ of 90.

    although a normal IQ falls between 84 and 116 the difference observed in this study is still quite considered significant!
    Normal IQ is considered to fall between 84 and 116. The difference observed in this study is significant.
    Never use an exclamation point in scientific writing.

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