I am not an English teacher, but I will look through it and correct any obvious errors. It looks good, but the last paragraph could use some work - the last paragraph is always hard for me too, but it is important to give a good final impression
Please help. I am not a native English speaker and always have trouble when writing formal documents. Thank you-
As a UCSF Medical Center volunteer I compile new admit packets, assist the unit secretary with basic administrative work, [perform] clerical duties, and answer call lights. Volunteering in a hospital has influenced my decision
on being[to be] a Pre-Med student. Moreover, being an intern at a biotech company allows me to work alongside highly skilled scientists who build disease models for oncology, cardiovascular [disease], inflammation and metabolic diseases. Interning at -----, Inc. I conducted media changes and counted cells as well as eliminated the risk of cell contamination. My internship at -------, Inc. enhanced my prospective[perspective] as a student researcher and helped me understand medicine on a molecular level.
While I enjoy volunteering and interning I consider tutoring children in the Latino community to be
the[my] most rewarding [activity]. I have tutored at ------. As an active member of my community[,] I help children with their history and science courses. Tutoring children in the Latino community allows me to engage with their parents and reiterate the importance of higher education.
As a volunteer at a hospital I understand the importance of giving back to my community. During my experience as a volunteer at UCSF Medical Center I
realize[have realized] that volunteering my time to patients is something I will to continue throughout my undergraduate career. In 2015 I will continue volunteering, tutoring and attending community events. In five years I will have traveled to Asia and South America along with returned to a once visited country, Iceland[as well as returning to Iceland, a country I have visited before]. Academically, I will have commissioned as a Second Lieutenant and earned a bachelor degree with [the] successful completion of a MCAT prep course.
In the year 2020 I will attend my first solo exhibition reception in San Francisco, California. Aside from my passion for medicine---painting is a therapeutic hobby of mine that I am fortunate to excel in. As an active officer of the military in 2020 I will be enjoying my time back home in the Bay Area.
Inten years from now I will still be an artist and a hardworking student in a residency program at a hospital overseas.
Thereafter at the age of 38 in the year 2025 I will be a practicing cardiothoracic surgeon in the US Military. I will own a gallery and rent the space to up and coming artists from all over the world.
Conclusively[In conclusion], I am now taking the next step in life to challenge myself in illustrating my passion through knowledge[this sentence is unclear - do you have a passion about knowledge?]. I am reminded that knowledge is never selfish and should be used to help those in need. Lastly[Finallly], with the assistance [of]various degrees, internships, fellowships and work experience from military and civilian life I will have reached my ultimate dream---happiness.
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