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Fingerjazz

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Please check out my song lyrics and help me with grammar and style. Any help is highly appreciated. Thank you!

IN A GLOW

Every time you cross my way
I think about what I should say
And time
Is moving so slow

And when you smile, I drop my eyes,
I blame myself, I realize
That I’m
All in a glow.

But, unless you’re near,
I’m a ruined man
How I long to stand by you again

But you’re away, the moment’s gone
So here and now I’m all alone
Oh no,
I’m all in a glow.

I was careless the other day
Always doing well
Now I cannot find the way
To break your violent spell

I’m all in a glow
I’m all in a glow
I’m all in a glow
Of love

No one ever was to melt
The coldness of my heart
Now that blaze I finally felt
Is too hot for a start

I’m all in a glow
I’m all in a glow
I’m all in a glow
Of love

Can you read the poems in my head?
Can you hear my heartbeat?
Can you understand that I’ve got more
Than just a shame,
Than just a flush upon my cheeks?

Every time you cross my way
I think about what I should say
Oh no,
I’m all in a glow
 

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Every time you cross my way (cross my path, come my way)
I think about what I should say
And time Is moving so slow (moves so slow/?)
And when you smile, I drop my gaze,(drop your eyes and you may not be able to find them again.)
I blame myself, I realize
That I’m
All in a glow.

It's good, just cross my way and drop my eyes are a bit strange, but in songs strange things can sometimes work. Just scream it loud enough and no-one will know.:)
 

Fingerjazz

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JTRiff, thanks a lot!
 
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