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    Check My Sentence Please

    Countries have believed in the necessity of cooperation in order to subsist, increase economic-social prosperity, and with the globalization trend, trading of goods, service and technology have increased and been liberalised among countries.

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    Re: Check My Sentence Please

    Anyone?

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    Re: Check My Sentence Please

    Quote Originally Posted by Volcano1985 View Post
    Countries have believed in the necessity of cooperation in order to subsist and to increase economic-social prosperity. With the trend toward globalization trend, trading of goods, service and technology have has increased and been liberalised among countries.
    I think this is what you meant? It was unclear what they "have believed" in the past and how globalization has changed things.

    The subject of "has" is trading.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: Check My Sentence Please

    Yes, this is.

    They have believed that trading among countries is essentail to subsist economically.(Like export-import) And the globalization has made countries trade with each other for the goods, services and technologies not available within their own borders.

    Clear now?

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    Re: Check My Sentence Please

    Hi, friend,

    Why don't you write it in small sentences instead of making it a hotchpotch?
    Last edited by varmaswathy81; 12-Apr-2011 at 18:47.

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    Re: Check My Sentence Please

    Quote Originally Posted by varmaswathy81 View Post
    Hi, friend,

    Why don't you write it in small sentences instead of making it a hotchpotch?
    And why don't you suggest an alternative instead of offering only criticism?
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    Re: Check My Sentence Please

    Sorry,

    I never meant to criticize anybody, because I am also a person who love to learn English . I just expressed what I felt when I went through the sentence. I felt that, it will be more easy to grasp if he could use small sentences. Especially for ordinary readers like me. thats all.

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    Re: Check My Sentence Please

    Why would I think 'small' ?

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    Re: Check My Sentence Please

    You are mistaken friend.

    I just meant you to write that in short sentences, instead of making it a mix of sentences. Then it will be easy to understand for ordinary readers who are not very proficient in language.

    Anyway, I don't want to continue with this argument.
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    Re: Check My Sentence Please

    I think my suggested rewrite and your response are both clear.
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