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    Default complete the letter

    Hi everyone,
    I understand how hard it is to correct someone else’s writings, all right! You don't need to create a new one. Just look at this.
    Now I am presenting it like a BIG-gap-fill exercise. Let’s talk about

    WRITING TASK 1

    You want to study in Britain. Write a letter to the president to change one of your courses and inquire some relevant information. You do NOT need to write your own address.

    Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir/ Madam,

    Below are my suggestions (commentaries to clarify some ideas are given in the brackets)

    Dear Sir/ Madam,

    (First, EXPLAIN YOUR MATTER IN BRIEF)

    I am writing you to inquire about … (What should I put here?)

    (Next, DESCRIBE THE SITUATION IN DETAIL.)

    (As I got it from the question a person would like to study in Britain. Where? If it is a British university or college you probably should give your educational background. Any suggestions?)

    I graduated from secondary school in Russia this year and I am planning to continue my education in Britain.
    (Any other facts?)

    After careful consideration I decided to apply for admission to your college, since I think it is the best place to advance my career.

    My area of concentration in … (college) will be … (specialty)….

    (the best I’ve managed to think up)


    (After that, ACTIONS TO BE TAKEN)

    I am interested in receiving more information …

    (Right here I should request course change and relevant info. The problem is I can’t imagine what kind of change of what kind of course I might need to change. What relevant information exists, anyway?)

    (Finally, CLOSE YOUR LETTER)

    Enclosed is a self-addressed, stamped envelope for your convenience in replying. Thank you for your time and consideration.

    Yours faithfully,
    Signature

    FEEL FREE TO CHANGE ANY PART OF MY WRITING

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    Default Re: complete the letter

    OK, I'm in a rush, so I am going to make a couple of suggestions now and will be back later for more.

    First, I'd start the l;etter by saying:
    I am writing to ask whether it is possiblle to change one of my courses.

    I'd finish with:
    Thjanking you in adv ance, I look forward to hearing from you,


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    Default Re: complete the letter

    Dear tdol,

    Thank you for your attention to my request. The fog is going to clear out, isn't it? So I will begin as follows

    Dear Sir/Madam,

    I am writing to ask whether it is possiblle to change one of my courses.

    I graduated from secondary school in Russia this year and I am planning to continue my education in Britain. Does it look right to you?
    After careful consideration I decided to apply for admission to your college, since I think it is the best place to advance my career. What next? Time to get down to facts. Anyone to develop the context?
    ......................

    Enclosed is a self-addressed, stamped envelope for your convenience in replying.


    Thank you in advance and look forward to hearing from you soon.

    Yours faithfully,

    ..................

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