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    Default Could you check my CL

    COVER LETTER


    of xxxxxx xxxxx

    900x, x xxxxx Str., app.x
    xxxxxxxx

    tel. 00xxxxxxxxxxxxx

    mobile tel. 00xxx



    xxxx, 29th August 2005



    RE: applying for the position of a caregiver


    Dear Sir or Madam,



    I am interested in applying for a position of a caregiver in Canada as advertised by the agency “xxxx”-xxxxxxxx.



    My experience working as a full-time English teacher prepared me for such duties. I feel I have a range of relevant skills. They have greatly developed both through my degree and my work experience. My job gave me the ability to deal with children and to get well along with the other people. I enjoy giving and receiving love. I have chosen my profession because it having to do with service to other people. The major force that has directed me is the sense of service and dedication.



    Learning and education is very important to me. I think that such experience will be a good contribution to my career. I like to find things out for myself instead of being told or reading about them in books. I like traveling because it allows me to expand my mind. I have always wanted to encounter new places and people, who can teach me things that I do not know and who can expose me to new experiences.



    Enclosures:

    • CV
    • A copy of translated diploma
    • Letters of recommendation
    • Photos


    Thank you for your time and consideration.







    Yours faithfully,







    xxxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx

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    Tdol is offline Editor, UsingEnglish.com
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    to get well along with- get along well with...
    I enjoy giving and receiving love- personally, I feel this sentence is a bit too strong for an application
    instead of being told or reading about them - I'd put 'told about or reading about...'
    I'd add 'I look forward to hearing from you;' as well as the thanks at the end

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    Thank you, tdol! As always you are fast and ready to help. If you are a potential employer, would you hire me reading such CL?))))

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    Default Re: Could you check my CL

    In closing the document, ask for the opportunity to discuss the available opening and indicate when you'll follow up.

    "Learning and education is very important to me" - if possible, try to rewrite this sentence, as it is not sounding good.

    Your cover letter needs a final polish so that it appears more professional. Good luck!

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    Last edited by Tdol; 25-Mar-2006 at 08:20.

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