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    Pana Topoonyanont is offline Newbie
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    Please correct my grammar (song lyrics)

    Hi, everyone

    Soon it will be my best friend's birthday. As it is our 3-year anniversary, I wrote her a song. The problem is that I'm not a native speaker, so I'm not sure with some grammars in my song lyrics. Please help me with that. Any help will be highly appreciated. Thank you so much.

    "My Best Friend's Smile"

    Oh your smile, like the beautiful sunshine
    It keeps this whole word alive and warm
    Wonderful things in this world are here
    As the sun is still shining

    But someday if you really feel so blue
    Never lose hope as you'll stop smiling
    And how can flowers in this world bloom
    If there's no light of your smile

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    Re: Please correct my grammar (song lyrics)

    Hi, I am not an English teacher, but as a native speaker, I think your lyrics look fine. I think there is more latitude given in lyrics to keep the rhyme and meter. In your second line, I think you mean world, not word, but that is probably a typo.

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