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    The pattern of a revoloution

    Please, check if the following passage is grammatically correct. Thanks!

    In addition, the fact is that as the time passes, any revoloution tends to become a radical and, sometimes, even a bloody one. We can identify such a pattern in the French Revolution which began in an attempt to bring about reforms, later developed into resistance to the monarchy, then went as far as executing King Louis the 16th, and ended up in a bloodbath in which many of its participants were massacred.

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    Re: The pattern of a revoloution

    Quote Originally Posted by motico View Post
    In addition, the fact is that as the time passes, any revoloution tends to become a radical and, sometimes, even a bloody one. We can identify such a pattern in the French Revolution, which began in an attempt to bring about reforms, later developed into resistance to the monarchy, (then) went as far as executing King Louis the 16th, and ended up in a bloodbath in which many of its participants were massacred.
    We generally write Louis XVI.
    I prefer the to its.

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    Re: The pattern of a revoloution

    Quote Originally Posted by motico View Post
    Please, check if the following passage is grammatically correct. Thanks!

    In addition, the fact is that as the time passes, any revoloution tends to become a radical and, sometimes, even a bloody one. We can identify such a pattern in the French Revolution which began in an attempt to bring about reforms, later developed into resistance to the monarchy, then went as far as executing King Louis the 16th, and ended up in a bloodbath in which many of its participants were massacred.
    two additional comments

    you misspelled revolution twice

    The revolution didn't execute the King, people did. I would rephrase.

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