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    Dear forum
    Please help me correcting the below Aspiration part of my resume.

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    Aspiration

    Seeking recognition across horizontal and vertical bars of the organization by utilizing my skills and experience to the fullest, taking job with a sense of responsibility, making positive contribution towards organization helping it achieve its goal which in turn could pave the way of a grand carrier for me.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Garcia_kar View Post
    Dear forum
    Please help me correcting the below Aspiration part of my resume.

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    Aspiration

    Seeking recognition across horizontal and vertical bars of the organization by utilizing my skills and experience to the fullest, taking job with a sense of responsibility, making positive contribution towards organization helping it achieve its goal which in turn could pave the way of a grand carrier for me.
    It's strange: horizontal and vertical bars?
    And somewhat inappropriate:
    pave the way of a grand carrier for me?

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    Thanks for the kind reply,
    Actually by horizontal and vertical bars I meant, inside and outside the working unit of mine. These days I assume organizational chart is represented by few horizontal and vertical bars. Horizontal bars usually represent similar entities and vertical bars are those units who controls many horizontal units like mine.

    By paving the way........, I want to express my desire to get good carrier path in lieu of my work and expertise.

    Please suggest now.......

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    Default Re: Aspiration

    career, not carrier.

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    Default Re: Aspiration

    Horizontal and vertical structures perhaps?

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    Quote Originally Posted by Garcia_kar View Post

    Please suggest now.......
    It needs to be completely rewritten. I'm not going to do that for you. It's your resume. You can look up examples of how to write the objective on the resume.

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    Default Re: Aspiration

    Come on,
    I am not saying to write my personal stuffs. I needed a help on these 4 lines which are simple English.

    Dear forum pl help me to rephrase it pl.

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