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    Question Could any native speaker of Engilsh please edit my passage?

    Hello all,

    Where would you like to be professionally in ten years? Use details to support your response.

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    "I would like to be in a speaking-English country and improve my English skills. During ten years I have to interact with the speakers of English and learn how to organize this language."

    Is this passage cohesive and coherent within 15 seconds?

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    Default Re: Could any native speaker of Engilsh please edit my passage?

    Quote Originally Posted by Ever Student View Post
    Hello all,

    Where would you like to be professionally in ten years? Use details to support your response.

    (for speaking skills)


    "I would like to be in a speaking-English country and improve my English skills. During ten years I have to interact with the speakers of English and learn how to organize this language."

    Is this passage cohesive and coherent within 15 seconds?
    There are a few defects.
    This is what I'd say:
    "I would like to be in an English-speaking country, improving my English skills. During those ten years I will have been interacting with speakers of English and learning how to organize my use of this language."

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    Default Re: Could any native speaker of Engilsh please edit my passage?

    Quote Originally Posted by Raymott View Post
    This is what I'd say:
    "I would like to be in an English-speaking country, improving my English skills. During those ten years I will have been interacting with speakers of English and learning how to organize my use of this language."
    Thank you,
    It pleased me to meet you here again.

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