Is it written by a native author?

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joham

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Could you please be so kind as to have a brief look at this article and tell me how it reads to native speakers? Is it written by a native author? I'd like to make sure it is good English and learn it by heart. Thank you very much in advance.

As you slowly open your eyes, look around, notice where the light comes into your room, listen carefully, see if there are any new sounds you can recognize; feel with your body and spirit, see if you can sense the freshness in the air.

Yes, yes, yes, it’s a new day, it’s a different day, and it’s a bright day! And most importantly, it is a new beginning for your life, a beginning where you are going to make new decisions, take new actions, make new friends and take your life to a totally unprecedented level.

In your mind’s eye, you can see clearly the things you want to have, the places you intend to go, the relationships you desire to develop, and the positions you aspire to reach. You can hear your laugher of joy and happiness on the day when everything happens as you dream! You can see the smiles on the people around you when the magic moment strikes. You can feel your face is getting red, your heart is beating fast, and your blood is rushing all over your body, to every single corner of your being!

You know all this is real as long as you are confident, passionate, and committed. And you are confident, you are passionate, you are committed! You will no longer fear making new sounds, showing new facial expressions, using your body in new ways, approaching new people, and asking new questions. You will live every single day of your life with absolute passion, and you will show your passion through the words you speak and the actions you take. You will focus all your time and effort on the most important goals of your life. You will never succumb to challenges and hardships; you will never waver in your pursuit of excellence. After all, you are the best, and you deserve the best!

As your coach and friend, I can assure you the door to all the best things in the world will open to you, but the key to that door is in your hand. You must do your part, you must faithfully follow the plans you make and take the actions you plan, you must never quit, you must never fear! I know you must do it, you can do it, you will do it, and you will succeed! Now stand firm and tall, make a fist, get excited and yell it out: I must do it! I can do it! I will do it! I will succeed!
 

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***** A NON-TEACHER'S OPINION *****


(1) Of course, I do not know whether or not it was written by a native speaker.

(2) But I do believe two things:

(a) It is very well written.

(b) Most native speakers here in my country could not write this well.

(High school teachers and even many university professors, I hear, are

going crazy trying to teach today's youth how to write a decent sentence,

let alone a long passage such as the one that you have kindly shared with us.)

(3) This kind of uplifting and inspiring writing is very popular in my country. Quite a

few people make a good (very good!!!) living writing such books and giving

lectures.

(4) I am glad for you that it inspires you. We all need something to believe in as we

journey through life.


Respectfully yours,


James
 

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It's either a native speaker or someone at the same level. If you like the ideas in it, then go ahead and learn it.
 

Baz1

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I'm fairly sure this is USA English, not UK English.

The differences are subtle, and most English-speakers accept American variations without flinching (too much).

It's very obviously a sales patter. You don't find this sort of prose in British advertisements.
 

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I like your text. However, I have a little suggestion:

You can feel your face is getting red, your heart is beating fast, and your blood is rushing all over your body, to every single corner of your being!

I would remove what I highlighted. At least the first one.
 
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