Bassim
VIP Member
- Joined
- Mar 1, 2008
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Bosnian
- Home Country
- Bosnia Herzegovina
- Current Location
- Sweden
Please, would you proofread my poem "Recession."
RECESSION
How we made love time and again,
drenched our bodies in passion,
became drunk on desire.
How we enjoyed travels to exotic places,
candlelight dinners at smart restaurants,
wine testing and dance until dawn.
How the world was an interesting place
and people friendly and nice,
until the day when I was sacked.
How you comforted me,
standing beside all the time, like a fair maiden
giving water to the wounded soldier.
And how four months later
you threw me out,
yelling "I won't support a parasite!"
RECESSION
How we made love time and again,
drenched our bodies in passion,
became drunk on desire.
How we enjoyed travels to exotic places,
candlelight dinners at smart restaurants,
wine testing and dance until dawn.
How the world was an interesting place
and people friendly and nice,
until the day when I was sacked.
How you comforted me,
standing beside all the time, like a fair maiden
giving water to the wounded soldier.
And how four months later
you threw me out,
yelling "I won't support a parasite!"