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    motico is offline Member
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    The second attempt

    Please, check if the following passages are grammatically correct. Thanks!

    The second attempt to get the hands on Jason was after the attack on the … in 2002. At that time Jason was hiding in northeastern Ajisatn, near the city of Balal-Najad, in the cave complex of Ora-Drora. A special force tried to capture him there but after a chase of several months Jason was able to escape to Takisland not before borrowing 7,000$ from his aides.

    Since then, the intelligence agencies have gathered information that almost led to him. In Takisland, one of his deputies, Lee Oren, was captured as well as his partner, Eli Bruce. As for Jason, thanks to his loyal aides, he managed to escape. Only after nearly ten years the authorities succeeded in tracing him. This time the chances of capturing him seemed much better.

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    Re: The second attempt

    I am not a teacher, but I am a native speaker. Please see my corrections below.

    Quote Originally Posted by motico View Post
    Please, check if the following passages are grammatically correct. Thanks!

    The second attempt to get the[their] hands on Jason was after the attack on the in 2002. At that time Jason was hiding in northeastern Ajisatn, near the city of Balal-Najad, in the cave complex of Ora-Drora. A special force tried to capture him there but after a chase of several months Jason was able to escape to Takisland not before[after] borrowing 7,000$[$7,000] from his aides.

    Since then, the intelligence agencies have gathered information that almost led [them] to him. In Takisland, one of his deputies, Lee Oren, was captured as well as his partner, Eli Bruce. As for Jason, thanks to his loyal aides, he managed to escape. Only after nearly ten years [did] the authorities succeeded[succeed] in tracing him. This time the chances of capturing him seemed much better.

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