It’s me again. Sorry, I was away on business, but now I am back to discover some encouraging replies on my last post. Thank you.
OK, let’s pick up our tutorial where we stopped.
Sounds frightening… But we’ll make it if we follow simple rules.
The first rule - KEEP IT AS SIMPLE AS POSSIBLE
Be practical – simple ideas come easy and take less effort to develop.
Don’t be tempted to amaze your examiner with profound knowledge of slang, idioms and pedantic words. Different styles, used in one essay, may produce a funny alienating mixture. Of course, I wouldn’t vote for dull writing. A bit of variety never hurts.
The second rule – DEVELOP YOUR PARAGRAPHS
A good paragraph must have
1) Topic sentence (statement)
2) Arguments – 3 arguments advisable, each followed by
3) Supporting details
4) Transition words and markers
To illustrate this, let’s suppose a model task.
How could I make you put off by my repulsive appearance? I really need to be persuasive.
I could arrange it in order of development steps.
I am ugly (only statement, undeveloped - no arguments, no supporting details).
I am ugly. I am old, bald and untidy (statement, 3 arguments, no supporting details)
Statement - I am ugly.
Argument1 - I am old.
Supporting detail 1 - I was born before the World War II.
Argument 2 - I am bald.
Supporting detail 2 - You could see your reflection in the top of my head.
Argument 3 - I am untidy.
Supporting detail 3 - I have dirty marks all over my clothes.
(The gaps are here to be filled in with additional words that make your writing smooth or cohesive.)
… I am ugly. … I am old. I was born before the World War Two. … I am bald. You could see your reflection in the top of my head. … I am untidy. I have dirty marks all over my clothes.
(transition words and markers added)
In my opinion, I am ugly. First of all, I am old. I was born before the World War II. Secondly, I am bald. You could see your reflection in the top of my head. Finally, I am untidy. I have dirty marks all over my clothes.
Of course, you may go further and link a pair “argument – example” into one sentence using additional transitions, but it would not change the idea of the paragraph and, therefore, up to you to decide.
OK, let’s go on to our task and apply our strategy to the first paragraph.
Enormous effort is put into researching and marketing 'the perfect potato crisp' while research into stress at work, for example, is ignored. How important are staff working conditions? Should employers research and improve the working conditions of their staff or should they concentrate more on their product?
Nowadays, most businesses are concerned primarily with improving and pushing products at all costs, therefore neglecting the strain this strategy puts on their personnel. I believe it is of vital importance to restrain excessive work load. I also think employers should pay more attention to organizing friendly working environment for their employees.
In my point of view, conditions that employers provide for their personnel are very important. Fist of all, uncomfortable offices affect the pace of work. Extra efforts to keep everything organized may become the biggest time wasters. Secondly, inconvenient timetables influence labour productivity. Repetitive long hours at work get workers exhausted. Finally, relations between managers and employees matter. Unfriendly atmosphere undermine self-esteem, co-operation and ability of staff to come up with creative ideas.
Well guys, I really need to go. Thank you all for reading this. I hope you find this intelligible.
If not – smash your screen, I will compensate for it!
P.S coming next time – TIMING ISSUES, THE REST OF ESSAY.
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