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    style of writing?

    The Astellas Groupís business philosophy has three elements ó raison d'Ítre, mission and beliefs. This business philosophy expresses the companyís of aiming to contribute to the health of people around the world

    I am a bit confuse with the line; the company's of aiming - what style is this?

    Can not we write it in a plain English.... the company's aim to contribute...

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    Re: style of writing?

    Not a teacher only a native.

    I think that the Astellas Group is guilty of using 'business speak', I think this from looking at your other posts also. They are purposely using terms/phrases that sound impressive, however they are inappropriate and often lead to confusion. This is an increasing critisim in Britain, especially of councils and in job adverts.

    I agree with you, plain English should be used.

    ps. I don't think that the highlighted text is grammatically correct either.

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