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    chowbarry is offline Junior Member
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    Default Please help me improve the following sentences?

    Please help me improve the following sentences?

    1) Concerning the project of repairing the male toilet at ABC park, I phoned to Mr. A, the coordinator of Supplies Department's contractor, yesterday. Mr. A revealed that the repairing work is currently all but completed, only awaiting the completion of replacing several wash basins. Mr. A added that if they are permitted to close the male toilet for two days, the whole repairing work can be completed within three days times, one week earlier than the first estimated.

    2) Two workers from TVD cleansing company went to ABC park yesterday morning and carried out the third anti-mosquito operation. (The remaining two operations will be held on 12.07.2011 and 29.07.2011) The operation was successfully finished at noon and no adverse report have been reported up to now. Please see the below pictures for your reference. Thank you for your attention!

    Many thanks in advance!

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    Default Re: Please help me improve the following sentences?

    Quote Originally Posted by chowbarry View Post
    Please help me improve the following sentences?

    1) Concerning the project of repairing the male toilet at ABC park, I phoned to Mr. A, the coordinator of Supplies Department's contractor, yesterday. Mr. A revealed (OR indicated) that the repairing work is currently all but completed, only awaiting the completion of replacing the replacement of several wash basins. Mr. A added that if they are permitted to close the male toilet for two days, the whole repairing work can be completed within three days times, one week earlier than the first estimated.

    2) Two workers from TVD cleansing company went to ABC park yesterday morning and carried out the third anti-mosquito operation. (The remaining two operations will be held on 12.07.2011 and 29.07.2011) The operation was successfully finished at noon and no adverse report havehas been reportedreceived up to now. Please see the below pictures for your reference. Thank you for your attention!

    Many thanks in advance!
    A few changes.

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    chowbarry is offline Junior Member
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    Default Re: Please help me improve the following sentences?

    billmcd, thank you very much!

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