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    hii,
    Is this dedication good? Any mistakes? Any suggestions? Thanks in advance ^^

    Dedication

    To my dear parents,

    As a token of my gratitude for the support, sacrifices and every effort
    they have done for my education and formation.

    To my brothers,

    For their (affectation) affection, compréhension
    and patience.
    To my friends and all those who have a relationship of close or far
    with the realization of this project.

    I dedicate this work
    Last edited by ucef; 10-Jun-2011 at 16:27.

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    Quote Originally Posted by ucef View Post
    hii,
    Is this dedication good? Any mistakes? Any suggestions? Thanks in advance ^^

    Dedication

    To my dear parents,

    As a token of my gratitude for the support, sacrifices and every effort
    they have done for my education and formation.

    To my brothers,

    For their affectation, compréhension and patience.
    To my friends and all those who have a relationship of close or far
    with the realization of this project.

    I dedicate this work

    ***** NOT A TEACHER *****


    Hello, Ucef.


    (1) Of course, I will let the great teachers here check your dedication.

    (2) But I just had to tell you to immediately erase "affectation."

    English readers would laugh if they see this word. It is insulting to

    your brothers, too. It means something (something!!!) like NOT being

    sincere or honest. Were you thinking of "affection"?


    Sincerely,


    James

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    Quote Originally Posted by TheParser View Post
    ***** NOT A TEACHER *****


    Hello, Ucef.


    (1) Of course, I will let the great teachers here check your dedication.

    (2) But I just had to tell you to immediately erase "affectation."

    English readers would laugh if they see this word. It is insulting to

    your brothers, too. It means something (something!!!) like NOT being

    sincere or honest. Were you thinking of "affection"?


    Sincerely,


    James

    lol, well, thank you very much ^^" any word with which I can replace "affectation"?

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    Quote Originally Posted by ucef View Post
    lol, well, thank you very much ^^" any word with which I can replace "affectation"?
    Parser gave it to you - 'affection'.

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    Quote Originally Posted by fivejedjon View Post
    Parser gave it to you - 'affection'.

    Thank you so much, I did not pay attention ^^

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    Quote Originally Posted by ucef View Post
    hii,
    Is this dedication good? Any mistakes? Any suggestions? Thanks in advance ^^

    Dedication

    To my dear parents,

    As a token of my gratitude for the support, sacrifices and every effort
    they have done for my education and formation.


    To my brothers,

    For their affectation, compréhension and patience.
    To my friends and all those who have a relationship of close or far
    with the realization of this project.

    I dedicate this work

    ***** NOT A TEACHER *****


    Hello, Ucef:

    (1) While we are waiting for a language professional to

    check the complete dedication, may I make one other

    suggestion? (I know how much a dedication means to you.)

    (2) I suspect that "comprehension" is the correct word in

    French or Spanish, but I do not think it is what you are looking for

    in English. I think that "comprehension" in English usually refers

    to, say, a comprehension of English grammar.

    (a) I most respectfully suggest the word understanding.


    Sincerely,


    James

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    Quote Originally Posted by TheParser View Post
    ***** NOT A TEACHER *****


    Hello, Ucef:

    (1) While we are waiting for a language professional to

    check the complete dedication, may I make one other

    suggestion? (I know how much a dedication means to you.)

    (2) I suspect that "comprehension" is the correct word in

    French or Spanish, but I do not think it is what you are looking for

    in English. I think that "comprehension" in English usually refers

    to, say, a comprehension of English grammar.

    (a) I most respectfully suggest the word understanding.


    Sincerely,


    James

    Of course, your suggestions are highly appreciated It is what I suggested too. In fact, I have written understanding and replaced it with comprehension. Thank you

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    Quote Originally Posted by ucef View Post
    Of course, your suggestions are highly appreciated It is what I suggested too. In fact, I have written understanding and replaced it with comprehension. Thank you
    ***** NOT A TEACHER *****



    Ucef,


    (1) First, congratulations!!! I have learned from one of your other

    threads that you are graduating. I wish you the very best in

    your chosen field.

    (2) In English, we have a verb "to nitpick." That means something like to

    criticize someone for every little mistake. If a teacher always

    nitpicks, his/her students soon lose confidence and often lose interest.

    (3) Well, I do not want to nitpick. But I know what a serious student

    that you are, and I know that you want to speak the best English

    possible. So may I please discuss your note to me?

    (4) Maybe your note should be something like:


    In fact, I had first written "understanding" and then changed it

    to "comprehension."

    (a) I do not like to nitpick. The only reason that I am discussing it

    is that I feel that you wanted to know. I know that you want to

    use the clearest English possible when you write (business?)

    letters in the future.


    The best of luck to you.



    James

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    Quote Originally Posted by TheParser View Post
    ***** NOT A TEACHER *****



    Ucef,


    (1) First, congratulations!!! I have learned from one of your other

    threads that you are graduating. I wish you the very best in

    your chosen field.

    (2) In English, we have a verb "to nitpick." That means something like to

    criticize someone for every little mistake. If a teacher always

    nitpicks, his/her students soon lose confidence and often lose interest.

    (3) Well, I do not want to nitpick. But I know what a serious student

    that you are, and I know that you want to speak the best English

    possible. So may I please discuss your note to me?

    (4) Maybe your note should be something like:


    In fact, I had first written "understanding" and then changed it

    to "comprehension."

    (a) I do not like to nitpick. The only reason that I am discussing it

    is that I feel that you wanted to know. I know that you want to

    use the clearest English possible when you write (business?)

    letters in the future.


    The best of luck to you.



    James

    Thank you very much. I know that you are not nitpicking . Thank you for letting me know about my mistakes ^^ did you see the "acknowledgments" post? check it out please ^^

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