Wow! You have done a great job. Believe me: there are many
(many!!!) young (and not so young) Americans who could not
write as well.
Hopefully, a teacher will give you a complete evaluation, along with
I have only a few points. (Remember: you told me that you would
not be offended if I nitpicked.)
"Through my humble project, I ...." I suggest that you drop the
"humble." That word irritates a lot of people (I know from personal
experience). Of course, I understand that in your culture, it might
be a good idea to express humility. I was just thinking that "humble"
would not be a good idea for an American audience. Americans like
direct writing: In this project, I ....
The next point is really minor, but it means a lot to teachers. You need
cinematic field; afterward(s), I have .... (Some Americans prefer an "s"
Sorry to nitpick!!! This time a colon is better:
To approach the novel: the life of George Orwell ....
"After all others" is not needed. Just write:
Finally, I shed some light ....
And just one more nitpicking point: a comma in
...the movie, including camera shots and angles.
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