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    hi, What do you think about this conclusion?

    Through my humble project, I have tried in the first part to define the film adaptation, to shed some light on its history, its types, its importance and its necessity in the cinematic field, afterward, I have also tried to show to what extent a film may be faithful to its original work, illustrating it with some attitudes about the fidelity of an adaptation. Moreover, I have tried to give some differences between cinema and literature, in addition to adaptation as a type of translation. In the second part Iíve tried to approach the novel; the life of George Orwell, the historical background of Animal Farm, its synopsis, its major themes, its characters and its point of view. After all others, in the third part, I shed some light on the differences between the novel Animal Farm and its movie, the awards and the technical effects of the movie including camera shots and angles.

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    Quote Originally Posted by ucef View Post
    hi, What do you think about this conclusion?

    Through my humble project, I have tried in the first part to define the film adaptation, to shed some light on its history, its types, its importance and its necessity in the cinematic field, afterward, I have also tried to show to what extent a film may be faithful to its original work, illustrating it with some attitudes about the fidelity of an adaptation. Moreover, I have tried to give some differences between cinema and literature, in addition to adaptation as a type of translation. In the second part Iíve tried to approach the novel; the life of George Orwell, the historical background of Animal Farm, its synopsis, its major themes, its characters and its point of view. After all others, in the third part, I shed some light on the differences between the novel Animal Farm and its movie, the awards and the technical effects of the movie including camera shots and angles.
    ***** NOT A TEACHER *****


    Wow! You have done a great job. Believe me: there are many

    (many!!!) young (and not so young) Americans who could not

    write as well.

    ***

    Hopefully, a teacher will give you a complete evaluation, along with

    some recommendations.

    ***

    I have only a few points. (Remember: you told me that you would

    not be offended if I nitpicked.)

    "Through my humble project, I ...." I suggest that you drop the

    "humble." That word irritates a lot of people (I know from personal

    experience). Of course, I understand that in your culture, it might

    be a good idea to express humility. I was just thinking that "humble"

    would not be a good idea for an American audience. Americans like

    direct writing: In this project, I ....

    The next point is really minor, but it means a lot to teachers. You need

    a semicolon:

    cinematic field; afterward(s), I have .... (Some Americans prefer an "s"

    with "afterward.")

    Sorry to nitpick!!! This time a colon is better:

    To approach the novel: the life of George Orwell ....

    "After all others" is not needed. Just write:

    Finally, I shed some light ....

    And just one more nitpicking point: a comma in

    ...the movie, including camera shots and angles.


    Sincerely,


    James

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    Quote Originally Posted by TheParser View Post
    ***** NOT A TEACHER *****


    Wow! You have done a great job. Believe me: there are many

    (many!!!) young (and not so young) Americans who could not

    write as well.

    ***

    Hopefully, a teacher will give you a complete evaluation, along with

    some recommendations.

    ***

    I have only a few points. (Remember: you told me that you would

    not be offended if I nitpicked.)

    "Through my humble project, I ...." I suggest that you drop the

    "humble." That word irritates a lot of people (I know from personal

    experience). Of course, I understand that in your culture, it might

    be a good idea to express humility. I was just thinking that "humble"

    would not be a good idea for an American audience. Americans like

    direct writing: In this project, I ....

    The next point is really minor, but it means a lot to teachers. You need

    a semicolon:

    cinematic field; afterward(s), I have .... (Some Americans prefer an "s"

    with "afterward.")

    Sorry to nitpick!!! This time a colon is better:

    To approach the novel: the life of George Orwell ....

    "After all others" is not needed. Just write:

    Finally, I shed some light ....

    And just one more nitpicking point: a comma in

    ...the movie, including camera shots and angles.


    Sincerely,


    James

    I really don't know how to thank you You have really lifted my spirit. Thank you very much. Maybe we can be friends. The last point I am going to post up this week is the introduction. Next Monday I will submit my project to the administration. concerning nitpicking, I have no problem as long as I learn from my mistakes ^^. You're help is highly appreciated.

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    Quote Originally Posted by ucef View Post
    I really don't know how to thank you You have really lifted my spirit. Thank you very much. Maybe we can be friends. The last point I am going to post up this week is the introduction. Next Monday I will submit my project to the administration. concerning nitpicking, I have no problem as long as I learn from my mistakes ^^. You're help is highly appreciated.

    ***** NOT A TEACHER *****


    The nitpicker is back!!!


    I know that you really want to know this:

    Your help is highly ....

    Your country is very nice; May I borrow your cellphone; What is

    your middle name? etc.

    You're (you + are):

    Hey, James. You're an old man!; I think that you're a great student;

    You're a usingenglish. com fan, aren't you? etc.

    NOTE: Many native speakers also get confused. Don't feel bad. But

    if you make this mistake in business letters, you will make a bad

    impression on people. I want you to be a great success in life.


    James

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    Quote Originally Posted by TheParser View Post
    ***** NOT A TEACHER *****


    The nitpicker is back!!!


    I know that you really want to know this:

    Your help is highly ....

    Your country is very nice; May I borrow your cellphone; What is

    your middle name? etc.

    You're (you + are):

    Hey, James. You're an old man!; I think that you're a great student;

    You're a usingenglish. com fan, aren't you? etc.

    NOTE: Many native speakers also get confused. Don't feel bad. But

    if you make this mistake in business letters, you will make a bad

    impression on people. I want you to be a great success in life.


    James

    I knew it hahaha, I just did not pay attention to it ^^ "typo"

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    It seems that your project is very interesting, I have a question if you have no objection and since you are a student in the English department, so, in the "literature" project are students required to choose a book to analyze it?

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    Quote Originally Posted by symaa View Post
    It seems that your project is very interesting, I have a question if you have no objection and since you are a student in the English department, so, in the "literature" project are students required to choose a book to analyze it?

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    Salam, how are you doing? Thank you. In fact, it depends on your supervisor, they may ask you either to analyse a specific book or to personally choose one.

    Regards

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    Quote Originally Posted by ucef View Post
    Salam, how are you doing? Thank you. In fact, it depends on your supervisor, they may ask you either to analyse a specific book or to personally choose one.

    Regards
    Peace be to you, praise be to God.Thank you very much for your reply and good luck for you.

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    Peace be to you, praise be to God.Thank you very much for your reply and good luck for you.


    Hi, don't mention it good luck to you too

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    Quote Originally Posted by ucef View Post
    Hi, don't mention it???? good luck to you too
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