I can't really comment on the content, since you haven't given us the question, or stated what you are writing about.**According to my professor, my content is good but I have "extremely serious writing issues"**** Please help revise my paper. This paper should be in MLA format. Thank you so much!
Your professor is wrong. If this is your work, and this is your normal standard, you do not have "extremely serious writing issues" unless you are planning to submit this essay for publication.
You write better than most native speakers. If your professor is an American Professor of Ethics (as it appears he is), he possibly has problems with overseas students
Mrs. Nuvo has pancreatic cancer and strongly believes that she has a very small chance of living for another year. According to the statistics report given by Dr. Lupe, even with the best treatments, there is a low rate of survival for patients with this type of disease. Therefore, Mrs. Nuvo has refused to be treated at all. Mrs. Nuvo indicated that she would like to spend her remaining time at home with her loved ones rather than in the hospital, suffering from pain and agony of chemotherapy and radiation treatments. Dr. Lupe tells her that the statistics apply to the general people and it may not necessarily apply to her. He also informed her of medications she could take to help lessen the pain and discomfort she may feel during her treatments. Despite
ofit all, Mrs. Nuvo seemed to be adamant onabout her decision and only wants something to control the pain and wants to go home.
In this scenario, I am applying the ethical theory of Utilitarianism. First, we take a look at Mrs. Nuvo’s situation. She may be experiencing a wide range of feelings and emotions as cancer is not always an easy matter to deal with. Her emotions may have clouded her mind to a point where she’s not making good decisions and not considering what the doctors recommend. In preference utilitarianism, there is no clear-cut way to determine what action is likely to produce the best outcome for an individual, therefore, consideration of intrinsic value is replaced with consideration of actual preferences; what the person wants, desires or prefers (Munson, pp. 869). In this case, Mrs. Nuvo prefers to avoid any treatments and accept the reality of her illness. This may not be the best action, but it is what she desires. Ultimately, what will bring her the most happiness is spending her last days with her family rather than being confined in a hospital. The principle of utility would probably consider undergoing treatment as there are better outcomes than bad in this situation. According to the theory, “the action we take may produce some unhappiness, but it is a balance of happiness over unhappiness that the principle tells us to seek,” (Munson, pp. 863). Therefore, Dr. Lupe should persuade Mrs. Nuvo
in gettingto have the treatments. If Mrs. Nuvo allows herself to be treated then she has a good chance of surviving. It is true that chemotherapy and radiation treatments may not always be effective and can cause a great deal of discomfort for a while. But, on balance, if the treatments are successful, then it will likely stop or delay the progression of the disease s. She will then feel better and possibly live longer, which in this case, produces more happiness than unhappiness. According to Bentham and Mill, the greatest happiness principle is when an action is right if it produces the greatest happiness for the greatest number of people. I’m not sure if Mrs. Nuvo has informed her family about her current situation and if she has, I’m sure that they are not pleased with her decision. No one wants to lose a loved one. Therefore, she should consider her family’s feelings as I am sure that her family wants her to undergo treatments in the chance that she may survive the cancer and prolong her life. By making this decision to undergo treatments, she will not only produce happiness for herself, but for her family as well.
Mrs. Nuvo has a fighting chance and she should do more research and educate herself about the treatments and other alternative ways before making her decision. It is true that pancreatic cancer is serious, and it does take lives. But she must not lose sight of the fact that there are many survivors out there, too.
I'm at a loss - There are only a few grammatical errors here. Did your professor identify any of your "serious issues" specifically?
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