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    Is my paragraph correct?

    One responsibility that my mother gave me, was helping her in household chores when I was 9 years old. I think it was a good experience to me because by helping her I realized how doing household tasks was difficult and what my mother has done through. Therefore, I tried to be tidy and pitch in household chores,even though I was not being asked. In addition to that, I became an independent and self- reliant person since I knew many skills like cooking and doing my laundry, and many other things that I could use them in the future when I studied abroad.

    Thank you for taking the time to correct my paragraph.

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    Re: Is my paragraph correct?

    Quote Originally Posted by arzgol View Post
    One responsibility that my mother gave me was helping her in household chores when I was 9 years old.
    You don't need a comma between the subject and the verb. You could consider one if the subject is several lines long and confusing to read.
    I think it was a good experience to for me because, by helping her, I realized how doing household tasks was difficult and what my mother has done gone[?] through. Therefore, I tried to be tidy and pitch in with household chores, even though I was not being asked. In addition to that, I became an independent and self-reliant person since I knew many skills like cooking and doing my laundry, and many other things that I could use them in the future when I studied abroad.

    Thank you for taking the time to correct my paragraph.
    Good.

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