chowbarry
Junior Member
- Joined
- Apr 17, 2008
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Chinese
- Home Country
- China
- Current Location
- China
Please help me correct the following sentences?
1) As instructed, I visited ABC playground and DEF park for checking whether or not the players on the soccer pitch possessed valid booking document yesterday. Because of raining occasionally throughout the morning, I found nobody but 3 people was jogging on the pitch while I arrived at ABC playground at 11:00 a.m. I kept staying at the park until 12:00 a.m. and I didn't see anybody playing soccer at the pitch before i I left.
2) At 1:00 p.m., I arrived at DEF park as the rain eased off. I found 16 youngsters playing soccer at the pitch. I accompanied with a security staff to approach the youngsters and asked them for showing me their booking document. They responded that they didn't possess any booking document but they continued playing on the pitch. When asked to leave the pitch, all of them refused to follow suit. Worse still, two youngsters threatened to punch me if I didn't leave them away imminently. At that moment, I had no other alternative, but to report the case to the police at 3:00 p.m.. With the assistance of the police, the youngster reluctantly left the pitch at 3:50 p.m..
Many thanks in advance!
1) As instructed, I visited ABC playground and DEF park for checking whether or not the players on the soccer pitch possessed valid booking document yesterday. Because of raining occasionally throughout the morning, I found nobody but 3 people was jogging on the pitch while I arrived at ABC playground at 11:00 a.m. I kept staying at the park until 12:00 a.m. and I didn't see anybody playing soccer at the pitch before i I left.
2) At 1:00 p.m., I arrived at DEF park as the rain eased off. I found 16 youngsters playing soccer at the pitch. I accompanied with a security staff to approach the youngsters and asked them for showing me their booking document. They responded that they didn't possess any booking document but they continued playing on the pitch. When asked to leave the pitch, all of them refused to follow suit. Worse still, two youngsters threatened to punch me if I didn't leave them away imminently. At that moment, I had no other alternative, but to report the case to the police at 3:00 p.m.. With the assistance of the police, the youngster reluctantly left the pitch at 3:50 p.m..
Many thanks in advance!